Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-ippm-initial-registry-12
Joel Halpern Direct <jmh.direct@joelhalpern.com> Sun, 03 November 2019 21:00 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-ippm-initial-registry-12
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Thanks Al. I presumed all the ducks were in a row, but thought I should ask to be certain. Yours, Joel On 11/3/2019 3:14 PM, MORTON, ALFRED C (AL) wrote: > Hi Joel, > Thanks for your review, please see replies below. > Al > >> -----Original Message----- >> From: Joel Halpern via Datatracker [mailto:noreply@ietf.org] >> Sent: Friday, November 1, 2019 12:55 PM >> To: gen-art@ietf.org >> Cc: last-call@ietf.org; draft-ietf-ippm-initial-registry.all@ietf.org; >> ippm@ietf.org >> Subject: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-ippm-initial-registry-12 >> >> Reviewer: Joel Halpern >> Review result: Ready >> >> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area >> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed >> by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just >> like any other last call comments. >> >> For more information, please see the FAQ at >> >> <https://urldefense.proofpoint.com/v2/url?u=https- >> 3A__trac.ietf.org_trac_gen_wiki_GenArtfaq&d=DwICaQ&c=LFYZ- >> o9_HUMeMTSQicvjIg&r=OfsSu8kTIltVyD1oL72cBw&m=GTgiUHp01_savOvQS49iOt8XRHfRw >> hPgZj-TNotgKGk&s=M0ib3zYg2qffmRujLJv2h_WHQ16W9fOYat9hNtBqcFk&e=>. >> >> Document: draft-ietf-ippm-initial-registry-12 >> Reviewer: Joel Halpern >> Review Date: 2019-11-01 >> IETF LC End Date: 2019-11-06 >> IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat >> >> Summary: This document is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard >> >> Side note: I presume that as part of the process for >> draft-ietf-ippm-metric-registry (the normative reference the defines the >> structure used in this document) there has been discussion with IANA explicitly >> about the fact that this registry has an extremely large number of >> columns, some with extremely verbose content, and it will likely take some work for >> IANA to determine how to present this in a human-readable fashion? And the >> lesser point that is probably covered by existing procedures, but I wanted to >> check, that IANA is prepared to fill in the URLs scattered throughout the >> document? > [acm] > Yes and Yes. We prepared a mock-up of the new Registry at various stages > of development. Humbly, it was my idea to make the registry entries both > readable and useful. The IANA reps suggested the mock-up early-on, and we have > shared the different versions with the IPPM WG. We/IANA plan to make the > mock-up more widely available (but we failed to do that in time for Last Call). >> >> Second note: I did not review the accuracy of the descriptions of the metrics, >> but only looked for clarity. This is material well known to the WG, and mostly >> derived from other documents this or closely related working groups have >> produced. >> >> Major issues: N/A >> >> Minor issues: >> For those entries that are defining two (or more) closely related metrics, >> should the document actually have two (or more) lines for URL, since the >> text says that IANA is to assign two URLs. (And the list of differing >> fields should presumably include URL?) > [acm] > There are sections of the document that define more than one registry entry, > so yes, there will be >1 URLs, etc. in the corresponding rows. >> >> In the first part of section 5, there is a note about potentially splitting >> the registry entry into two registry entries. I can not understand the >> note. The registry is either defined with one entry or defined with two >> entries. Is this still an open item? (If so, my "ready" above clearly >> should be "Ready with issues.") I think it is just an erroneous retention >> of text from earlier? > [acm] > Exactly, it is a note left-stranded by editing later in the section, > thanks for catching it - deleted in the working version. > >> >> Nits/editorial comments: >> If there are no roles to define in 5.3.6, shouldn't it say "N/A" > [acm] > Actually, it should define the Roles (Src and Dst) as with other Metrics. > Something went wrong with formatting here - the text below the > section header disappeared... thanks for catching that! > >> Some comments and remarks say "None" which makes sense. Some say >> "Additional (Informational) details for this entry" which seems to be >> text left over from the template that should say "None"? > [acm] > Right, found and replaced in working copy. > >> >
- [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-i… Joel Halpern via Datatracker
- Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ie… MORTON, ALFRED C (AL)
- Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ie… Joel Halpern Direct
- Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ie… Alissa Cooper