[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-netmod-nmda-diff-10

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Reviewer: Matt Joras
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-netmod-nmda-diff-??
Reviewer: Matt Joras
Review Date: 2021-07-13
IETF LC End Date: 2021-07-02
IESG Telechat date: 2021-07-15

Nits/editorial comments:

Consider rewording this sentence in performance considerations:

"One possibility for an implementation to mitigate against such a possibility
is to limit the number of requests that is served to a client, or to any number
of clients, in any one time interval, rejecting requests made at a higher
frequency than the implementation can reasonably sustain."

It is excessively wordy and uses the word "possibility" twice. I would suggest
breaking this into two separate sentences.