[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bfd-multipoint-16.txt
Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Wed, 23 May 2018 13:47 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bfd-multipoint-16.txt
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Document: draft-ietf-bfd-multipoint-16.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20180512
IETF LC End Date: 20180521
IESG Telechat date: unknown
Summary: Ready with nits
Major issues: None
Minor issues: Missing keyword section (aka RFC 2119 section).
BTW don't forget RFC8174 reference in this section...
Nits/editorial comments:
- 1 page 3: i.e. -> i.e.,
- 4.4.1 page 5: example of MUST keyword use.
- 4.6 pages 6 and 7 ("is" is in page 6, "binding" in page 7):
"The minimum amount ... is binding to ..."
this wording is ambiguous because binding can be both a noun and a verb.
I suggest (for the first case) to add an article, e.g., "is the binding".
- 7 page 17: e.g. -> e.g.,
Regards
Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
- [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bfd-multipoint-16.… Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-bfd-multipoint… Greg Mirsky