[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-emu-tls-eap-types-10
Thomas Fossati via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Tue, 24 January 2023 18:35 UTC
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Reviewer: Thomas Fossati Review result: Ready I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-emu-tls-eap-types-?? Reviewer: Thomas Fossati Review Date: 2023-01-24 IETF LC End Date: 2023-01-27 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: The document adapts some existing EAP methods (EAP-FAST, EAP-TTLS, TEAP and PEAP) to be used with TLS 1.3. In particular: - it defines the new key derivations, - clarifies the use of client certs, - describes the rules around processing of application data, NewSessionTicket and resumption The draft is very clearly written and organised. The IANA section contains clear, unambiguous instructions. >From a gen-art perspective it looks ready to me. Major issues: none Minor issues: none Nits/editorial comments: OLD There remain some differences between EAP-TLS and other TLS-based EAP methods which necessitates this document. NEW There remain some differences between EAP-TLS and other TLS-based EAP methods which are addressed by this document. OLD Similarly, when the inner authentication protocol indicates that authentication has succeed NEW Similarly, when the inner authentication protocol indicates that authentication has succeeded Style (feel free to ignore): - "all of" => all - "both of [these]" => "both" - "whether or not" => "whether" Typos: - indicatoin - deriviation - identies
- [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-e… Thomas Fossati via Datatracker
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