[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-payload-rtp-vc2hq-05

Elwyn Davies <elwynd@dial.pipex.com> Fri, 04 May 2018 22:33 UTC

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Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review result: Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-payload-rtp-vc2hq-05
Reviewer: Elwyn Davies
Review Date: 2018-05-04
IETF LC End Date: 2018-05-16
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: Ready.  A well written and comprehensible document.  Thanks!  I
spotted a few minor nits noted below.

Major issues:\
None

Minor issues:
None

Nits/editorial comments:
Abstract, S1 and VC2 reference: Expand SMPTE (Soc of Motion Picture and
Television Engineers).

s4, para 3:  This para would probably be more helpful as a set of six bulleted
entries for the six different packet formats, and omitting the 'one which
carries' from each.

s4.1, Sequecnce Number: s/extneded/extended/

ss4.1, 4.2: The encoding and bit ordering of the numeric fields should be
specified (presumably this can be covered by a single statement that they are
all unsigned integers encoded in Network Byte Order.).

s4.4, third bullet: s/Hight/High/

s6.1, last para: Presumably this is left over from the template and should be
removed.

s8, para 1: s/This responsibility lays on anyone/This responsibility lies with
anyone/