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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-netconf-trust-anchors-22
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
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Document: draft-ietf-netconf-trust-anchors-22
Reviewer: Paul Kyzivat
Review Date: 2024-01-24
IETF LC End Date: 2024-01-24
IESG Telechat date: ?

Summary:

This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should 
be fixed before publication.

Note: This review was cursory because this reviewer is ignorant of Yang, 
and so cannot say anything meaningful about the substance of the document.

NITS: 2

1) NIT: section 1:

s/references truststore instances./references to truststore instances./

2) NIT: section 2.1.3.5

s/containing in inner list/containing an inner list/

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