Re: [hrpc] 2nd Research Group Last Call for draft-irtf-hrpc-research
Niels ten Oever <niels@article19.org> Tue, 14 February 2017 11:46 UTC
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Subject: Re: [hrpc] 2nd Research Group Last Call for draft-irtf-hrpc-research
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Hi Stephen, On 02/13/2017 04:31 PM, Stephen Farrell wrote: > > Hiya, > > On 13/02/17 14:50, Niels ten Oever wrote: >> Hi Stephen, >> >> On 02/10/2017 11:36 PM, Stephen Farrell wrote: >>> >>> I flicked quickly through this but I didn't give it a >>> full read-through. With so much change I hope someone does >>> do that, but I don't have time right now sorry. As always >>> (sorry:-) I have a few comments: >>> >>> - Abstract: >>> >>> I hate >1 para abstracts. >> >> Do you mean we should delete the hard return between these paras?: > > Well, you could, but I meant more that I think abstracts should > be a *short* one paragraph description of the content. I don't > think you end up with that by merging these paragraphs. > > IOW, please synopsize harder:-) > > That said, this is just a style thing. > I think you _are_ right. What about this: This document aims to propose guidelines for human rights considerations, similar to the work done on the guidelines for privacy considerations {{RFC6973}}. If you want to apply this work to your own, you can directly go to <xref target="model-for-developing-human-rights-protocol-considerations" />. The rest of the document explains the background of the guidelines and how they were developed. >> >> This document aims to propose guidelines for human rights >> considerations, similar to the work done on the guidelines for privacy >> considerations {{RFC6973}}. This is achieved by providing a proposal for >> a vocabulary to discuss the relation between human rights and Internet >> protocols, an overview of the discussion in technical and academic >> literature and communities, a proposal for the mapping of the relation >> between human rights and technical concepts, as well as guidelines. >> >> >> >> If you want to see how to apply this work to your own, you can directly >> go to <xref >> target="model-for-developing-human-rights-protocol-considerations" />. >> The rest of the document explains the background of the guidelines and >> how they were developed. >> >> I think it adds to readability and giving people what they need, but if >> you feel strongly.... >> >> The rest of the abstract is mostly boilerplate text, merging that with >> the above doesn't seem very useful to me. >> >> >> It also seems wrong at this point >>> for the document to say that it "aims to be a consensus >>> document" - but maybe the intent was to change that to >>> "this represents RG consensus" after Avri calls the result >>> of the 2nd LC? >> >> Exactly >> >>> >>> - section 4: >>> >>> This bit needs fixing: "if the IETF were to bake the UDHR >>> into its protocols, countries who do not agree with that >>> might completely withdraw from the standard setting process." >>> Countries do not participate in the IETF's process so this >>> makes no sense. I'd also not like s/countries/people from >>> countries/ as that assumes all a country's citizens agree >>> with something at once. I'd delete that argument, reducing >>> to three arguments, which is enough. >>> >> >> OK - removed. >> >>> - later in section 4: >>> >>> "Our position is..." I'm not at all sure that's appropriate >>> language for a document that claims to have rough consensus. >>> I'm also not at all sure that the rest of that para does in >>> fact represent rough consensus of the RG. >> >> You think this does not represent the rough consensus of the RG ? > > See below wrt the text that follows this phrase... > > The "Our position is..." phrase is problematic regardless. > > If the rest of the para does represent RG consensus then > there's no need for the problematic phrase. You could > delete it, or s/Our/The RG's/ and it'd be ok. The RG was meant all the time, so I indeed changed in into 'RG's'. > > If the rest of the para does not represent RG consensus > then I'm not sure why the authors' divergent opinions are > being presented, and if they are, it'd be better to be > clearer about that position not being part of the RG > consensus. And to also be as clear if there are any other > similar bits of text. (And it'd probably be good to be > consistently clear in how that's done too:-) > >> This >> has been in here for quite a while, and I haven't heard many people >> arguing against this position: >> >> ... hard-coding human rights into protocols is complicated and changes >> with the context. At this point is difficult to say whether hard-coding >> human rights into protocols is wise or feasible. > > The rest of that paragraph is much longer than that. And yes, > I'm not convinced that all of the rest of that para does > represent RG consensus, for example the last sentence which > says: > > "In addition, it > ensures that the impact of specific protocol on human rights is > carefully considered and that concrete design decisions are > documented in the protocol." > > I'd be surprised if that "ensures" was widely accepted. I > don't buy it anyway;-) > Changed into: In addition, it contributes to the careful consideration of the impact that a specific protocol might have on human rights and that concrete design decisions are documented in the protocol. > While this specific point isn't mega-important, since it's > fairly obvious that we can't often "ensure" stuff like this > gets done, I'm raising it as it could be indicative of > two relatively new to the process authors not quite getting > how RG consensus ought be reflected in a draft that claims > to represent the RG consensus. (And yes, apologies for not > raising this before.) > > Note that I'm not accusing you guys of anything here, (we > have an odd process, and this is an odd document even in > that odd process, and this bit of text is an even odder > corner case in that pile of oddity;-) but if there are > other bits of text that you think represent your opinion > but not the RG consensus (or where Avri thinks that) then > it'd be good to call those out in some consistent and > very clear manner, or to remove the text. I haven't gone > through the whole doc looking for that kind of text and > I'm not sure if anyone else has. My feeble excuse for not > having done that is that as I said before I think this'd > have been better not aiming to be an RG consensus document:-) > And I'm willing to believe you/Avri if told that you had a > look and there are in fact no other bits of text like that. > > If this turns out to be the only bit of text like this, > then I'd also wonder if it's really worth including. > I hope it's fixed, and I don't think there are any diverging views between RG and authors in the dock, and I also think there is no language left that implies that. But always happy to address unclarities of course. Thanks for being patient with these two relatively-new-to-the-process-authors :) Cheers, Niels > Cheers, > S. > > PS: I don't recall another IRTF RG consensus draft that > had bits of text representing the authors' non-consensus > opinions, but maybe someone else does in which case whatever > was done before could be copied. I'd be fine with us following > a precedent like that. If we're setting one here though, > then I'd prefer we try set a precedent that this kind of > thing ought be called out clearly and consistently. > > >> >> Cheers, >> >> Niels >> >>> >>> My conclusion from the list discussion and from the above >>> is that I'm supportive of this being published. That'll be >>> better as an informational RFC, as otherwise we may waste >>> time debating "so what's the experiment exactly" which'd >>> be a bit pointless in this case. >>> >> >> >> >>> Cheers, >>> S. >>> >>> >>> On 09/02/17 20:37, avri doria wrote: >>>> Hi, >>>> >>>> As mentioned in an earlier note, many changes were made to the draft in >>>> response to comments made during the last last call. As these changes >>>> were not just editorial, decided we needed another RGLC to review the >>>> changes. >>>> >>>> As of now starting a 2 weeks call on: >>>> >>>> Title : Research into Human Rights Protocol Considerations >>>> Authors : Niels ten Oever >>>> Corinne Cath >>>> Filename : draft-irtf-hrpc-research-10.txt >>>> Pages : 74 >>>> Date : 2017-02-08 >>>> >>>> The call will end on Noon 1200 UTC 24 Feb 2017, >>>> >>>> The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is: >>>> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-irtf-hrpc-research/ >>>> >>>> There's also a htmlized version available at: >>>> https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-irtf-hrpc-research-10 >>>> >>>> A diff from the previous version is available at: >>>> https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-irtf-hrpc-research-10 >>>> >>>> For a diff to the previous RGLC version (-07) >>>> Use: https://tools.ietf.org/rfcdiff >>>> and refer to drafts: >>>> https://www.ietf.org/archive/id/draft-irtf-hrpc-research-07.txt >>>> https://www.ietf.org/id/draft-irtf-hrpc-research-10.txt >>>> >>>> Please send comments to: hrpc@irtf.org >>>> >>>> Please forward this call to anyone you think should consider reviewing this doc. >>>> >>>> Thanks >>>> Avri >>>> >>>> >>>> >>>> --- >>>> This email has been checked for viruses by Avast antivirus software. >>>> https://www.avast.com/antivirus >>>> >>>> _______________________________________________ >>>> hrpc mailing list >>>> hrpc@irtf.org >>>> https://www.irtf.org/mailman/listinfo/hrpc >>>> >>> >>> >>> >>> _______________________________________________ >>> hrpc mailing list >>> hrpc@irtf.org >>> https://www.irtf.org/mailman/listinfo/hrpc >>> >> >> >> >> _______________________________________________ >> hrpc mailing list >> hrpc@irtf.org >> https://www.irtf.org/mailman/listinfo/hrpc >> >
- [hrpc] 2nd Research Group Last Call for draft-irt… avri doria
- Re: [hrpc] 2nd Research Group Last Call for draft… Stephen Farrell
- Re: [hrpc] 2nd Research Group Last Call for draft… Niels ten Oever
- Re: [hrpc] 2nd Research Group Last Call for draft… Stephen Farrell
- Re: [hrpc] 2nd Research Group Last Call for draft… Niels ten Oever
- Re: [hrpc] 2nd Research Group Last Call for draft… Stephen Farrell
- Re: [hrpc] 2nd Research Group Last Call for draft… avri doria
- Re: [hrpc] 2nd Research Group Last Call for draft… avri doria