[Int-dir] Intdir telechat review of draft-ietf-mls-architecture-10
Tatuya Jinmei via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Mon, 30 January 2023 06:46 UTC
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Subject: [Int-dir] Intdir telechat review of draft-ietf-mls-architecture-10
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Reviewer: Tatuya Jinmei Review result: Ready with Nits I am an assigned INT directorate reviewer for draft-ietf-mls-architecture-10.txt. These comments were written primarily for the benefit of the Internet Area Directors. Document editors and shepherd(s) should treat these comments just like they would treat comments from any other IETF contributors and resolve them along with any other Last Call comments that have been received. For more details on the INT Directorate, see https://datatracker.ietf.org/group/intdir/about/. I've reviewed the draft in terms of issues or concerns for the Internet Area. I've not seen any such issues. And, overall, the document is well written and looks complete for publication. The only possible nit I might note is that some technical terms such as "Proposal" or "Commit" messages are used without a reference or definition, which confused me while reviewing the draft. From a quick look at the protocol draft, these may be defined in that draft, but in any case, it would be more reader friendly if the architecture draft has a "terminology" section, listing some of those terms with a brief description and or a proper reference.
- [Int-dir] Intdir telechat review of draft-ietf-ml… Tatuya Jinmei via Datatracker
- Re: [Int-dir] Intdir telechat review of draft-iet… Benjamin Beurdouche
- Re: [Int-dir] [Last-Call] Intdir telechat review … Eric Vyncke (evyncke)