Re: [Lsvr] Minor fixes for draft-ietf-lsvr-bgp-spf-06 and draft-ietf-lsvr-l3dl-02

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From: "Acee Lindem (acee)" <acee@cisco.com>
To: "matt@mattanderson.net" <matt@mattanderson.net>, "lsvr@ietf.org" <lsvr@ietf.org>
Thread-Topic: [Lsvr] Minor fixes for draft-ietf-lsvr-bgp-spf-06 and draft-ietf-lsvr-l3dl-02
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Subject: Re: [Lsvr] Minor fixes for draft-ietf-lsvr-bgp-spf-06 and draft-ietf-lsvr-l3dl-02
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Hi Matt,

From: Lsvr <lsvr-bounces@ietf.org>; on behalf of Matt Anderson <matt@mattanderson.net>;
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Date: Tuesday, October 1, 2019 at 2:16 PM
To: "lsvr@ietf.org"; <lsvr@ietf.org>;
Subject: [Lsvr] Minor fixes for draft-ietf-lsvr-bgp-spf-06 and draft-ietf-lsvr-l3dl-02

Proofreading notes from reading these drafts.

draft-ietf-lsvr-bgp-spf-06
- section 2.2  - “… there will be the same unnumber of sessions” should read “number”.
- section 3.0 - “AF 16388” probably should read “AFI”
- section 4.2.1 - “Link NLIR endpoint prefixes and 1-128 for IPv6” should read “NLRI”
- section 8.1 - “configuratio” missing an ’n’

Thanks for the review – we will include these all in the -07 version.

Thanks,
Acee


draft-ietf-lsvr-l3dl-02
- section 3 - “widrawal” should be “withdrawal”
- section 18.1 - Need to add a word or two after “interfaces” to fix the grammar, or elsewhere in the sentence.  “Therefore, on multi-link interfaces MUST continue to send HELLOs as long as they are turned up.”