Re: [MMUSIC] WGLC on draft-ietf-mmusic-sdp-uks-03

[Flemming Andreasen <[e-mail]>]

Hi Martin

I also took a closer look at the document and have a few additional 
comments (as individual):

Non-Editorial
=========
Section 2.3, second paragraph:     The description on how 3PCC can work 
with the proposed mechanism is a bit vague. It would be helpful to 
expand it and provide an example.

Section 3, last paragraph:    The text seems out of place here. The text 
implicitly refers to the previous paragraph, which doesn't seem to make 
sense.

Section 3.1, second paragraph: "In the first session, Patsy is presented 
with the option to communicate with Norma"
How is that possible when the signaling originates from Mallory (I 
thought we had signaling integrity and authenticated identity) ?



Editorial
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Section 2.2, first paragraph: A reference after "key continuity" might 
be helpful.

Section 3.1, first paragraph after Figure 1:
- Old: The attack requires that Mallory obtain an identity binding for 
their own identity
- New: The attack requires that Mallory obtains an identity binding for 
her own identity

Section 3.1, 3rd paragraph after figure 1:
- Old: Patsy correctly believes that they are communicating with Norma. 
However Norma incorrectly believes they are talking to Mallory
- New: Patsy correctly believes that she is communicating with Norma. 
However Norma incorrectly believes she is talking to Mallory

Section 3.2, 4th last paragraph
- Old: in which the extension
- New: in which case the extension

Section 4.1, last paragraph
s/succeed/succeeds

Section 4.3
- Old: a ExternalSessionId
- New: an ExternalSessionId


On 1/7/19 9:08 AM, Flemming Andreasen wrote:
> Greetings MMUSIC
>
> This is to announce a 2 week WGLC on the draft:
>
> https://www.ietf.org/id/draft-ietf-mmusic-sdp-uks-03.txt
>
> as Proposed Standard. Please review and provide any comments you may 
> have on the document by Monday, January 21, 2019. Comments should be 
> sent to the document authors and the MMUSIC WG list. If you review the 
> document but do not have any comments, please send a note to that 
> effect as well.
>
> Thanks
>
> -- Flemming (MMUSIC co-chair)
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