Re: [mpls] Shepherd Writeup for draft-ietf-mpls-sfl-framework

Stewart Bryant <stewart.bryant@gmail.com> Wed, 09 October 2019 15:36 UTC

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Subject: Re: [mpls] Shepherd Writeup for draft-ietf-mpls-sfl-framework
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Dear Tarek

Thanks for the review. All corrections applied and a new version uploaded.

My only concern is that the Shepard's review refers to a personal draft 
by me. I think we should do one of two things here, either wait for that 
control draft to become a WG draft, or make it clear in the write-up 
that the control draft is optional and the technology could be deployed 
using SDN methods.

By chance I took a look at the control draft yesterday, and I think it 
has the handle mechanism that we spoke about at the last WG session in 
IETF 105. I wrote to George only yesterday, and look forward to his 
feedback on my analysis. Hopefully we should have this point tidied up 
before IETF 106 draft cut-off.

Best regards

Stewart


On 09/10/2019 05:45, Tarek Saad wrote:
>
> Hi authors,
>
> I have reviewed this document and took a first stab at the SWU at:
>
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-mpls-sfl-framework/shepherdwriteup/
>
> Please review and let me know if you have comments before I move 
> forward with this.
>
> Below are some nits that I think should be corrected too:
>
> Nits from my review:
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> 1) abstract:
>
> s/on the on the/on the
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Done
>
> 2) Introduction:
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> s/see (Section 2)/see (Section 3)
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Corrected
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> 3) Section 5
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> s/This is turn/This in turn
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Corrected
>
> Regards,
>
> Tarek
>