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Tal Mizrahi <tal.mizrahi.phd@gmail.com> Tue, 21 August 2018 06:45 UTC

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Date: Tue, 21 Aug 2018 09:45:48 +0300
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Hello,

I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this draft.
The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or routing-related
drafts as they pass through IETF last call and IESG review, and sometimes
on special request. The purpose of the review is to provide assistance to
the Routing ADs. For more information about the Routing Directorate, please
see http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir

Although these comments are primarily for the use of the Routing ADs, it
would be helpful if you could consider them along with any other IETF Last
Call comments that you receive, and strive to resolve them through
discussion or by updating the draft.

Document: draft-ietf-ospf-segment-routing-msd
Reviewer: Tal Mizrahi
Review Date: 21-Aug-2018
Intended Status: Standards Track

*Summary:*

This document is basically ready for publication, but has a couple of minor
issues and nits that should be resolved prior to publication.
*Minor Issues:*

   - Figure 1 seems to indicate that the MSD-Type and the MSD-Value are 2
   octets long each, whereas according to the text afterwards each of the two
   fields is 1 octet long.
   - Figure 2 – same comment.

*Nits:*

   - “provisioned..” --> “provisioned.” (extra period)
   - “Acknowledgements” --> “Acknowledgments”
   - “capabilites” --> “capabilities”
   - “the the” --> “the”


Cheers,
Tal.

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