Re: [salud] Editorial improvements to draft-ietf-salud-alert-info-urns-14

Dale,

I agree with both items.

Laura

2014-11-21 2:28 GMT+01:00 Dale R. Worley <worley@ariadne.com>:

> [as an author]
>
> Here are a couple of editorial items I think could be improved.  The
> first is a simple typo.  The second is changing the numbering of
> sections.  What do people think?
>
> Item 1:
>
>    9.1.2.  Initial IANA Registration
>
>    This document defines the <alert-category>s 'service', 'source',
>    'priority', 'duration', 'delay' and 'locale'.  The entries to be
>    added to the Alert URN Identifiers 'registry table' for each <alert-
>    category> are given in the respective sections below.
>
> One pair of quotes are misplaced; it should say "'Alert URN
> Identifiers' registry table".
>
> Item 2:
>
> Currently, section 9 is organized this way:
>
>    9.  IANA Considerations
>      9.1.  URN namespace identifier "alert"
>        9.1.1.  'Alert URN Identifiers' Registry
>        9.1.2.  Initial IANA Registration
>          9.1.2.1.  The "service" <alert-category> and <alert-identifier>s
>          9.1.2.2.  The "source" <alert-category> and <alert-identifier>s
>          9.1.2.3.  The "priority" <alert-category> and <alert-identifier>s
>          9.1.2.4.  The "duration" <alert-category> and <alert-identifier>s
>          9.1.2.5.  The "delay" <alert-category> and <alert-identifier>s
>          9.1.2.6.  The "locale" <alert-category> and <alert-identifier>s
>      9.2.  'Alert URN Providers' Registry
>
> Section 9.1 specifies the registrion of the "alert" namespace.
> Sections 9.1.1 and 9.1.2 and their descendants specify the alert
> identifiers registry.  Section 9.2 specified the alert providers
> registry.
>
> Putting the alert identifiers registry under 9.1 seems incorrect to
> me.  I think we want to reorganize the sections in this way:
>
>    9.  IANA Considerations
>      9.1.  URN namespace identifier "alert"
>      9.2.  'Alert URN Identifiers' Registry
>        9.2.1.  Initial IANA Registration
>          9.2.1.1.  The "service" <alert-category> and <alert-identifier>s
>          9.2.1.2.  The "source" <alert-category> and <alert-identifier>s
>          9.2.1.3.  The "priority" <alert-category> and <alert-identifier>s
>          9.2.1.4.  The "duration" <alert-category> and <alert-identifier>s
>          9.2.1.5.  The "delay" <alert-category> and <alert-identifier>s
>          9.2.1.6.  The "locale" <alert-category> and <alert-identifier>s
>      9.3.  'Alert URN Providers' Registry
>
> There are a few references to these sections that would have to be
> renumbered.
>
> Dale
>
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