Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-11
Donald Eastlake <d3e3e3@gmail.com> Tue, 21 January 2020 20:21 UTC
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From: Donald Eastlake <d3e3e3@gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-11
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Your welcome. (There is a typo in my review "SHOUD" -> "SHOULD".) Thanks, Donald =============================== Donald E. Eastlake 3rd +1-508-333-2270 (cell) 2386 Panoramic Circle, Apopka, FL 32703 USA d3e3e3@gmail.com On Tue, Jan 21, 2020 at 3:49 AM Eric Vyncke (evyncke) <evyncke@cisco.com> wrote: > > Thank you Donald for your review, it is very much appreciate. > > I will let the authors reply about the review > > Regards > > > -éric > > On 21/01/2020, 05:19, "iesg on behalf of Donald Eastlake" <iesg-bounces@ietf.org on behalf of d3e3e3@gmail.com> wrote: > > I have reviewed this document as (a very late) part of the security > directorate's ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being > processed by the IESG. > > The summary of the review is Ready with Nits. > > Sorry to get this review in so late but, while approved by the IESG, > the draft is still in revised draft needed state so this may do some > good. On the security front, although the draft is pretty complex and > I am not that familiar with HIP, I did not see any significant > security issues that were not already called out in the draft. So I > concentrated on possible editorial issues. > > Editorial: > > Section 1.1, 3rd paragraph, page 5. Delete "However," a the beginning > of the 2nd sentence. It doesn't make sense. > > Section 2.3, Definitions should be in alphabetic order. > > Section 2.3: It seems to me that people who are puzzled about what > something means are most likely to be puzzled by the acronym. So I > would put the acronym first, where there is an acronym or acronym-like > term to use, then the expansion in parenthesis or in the body of the > definition. This done for a couple of entries like CMAC and CKDF but > most are the other way. > > Section 3 last paragraph and Section 12.10 5th bullet: "to use" -> "use of" > > I think OGA and KEYMAT should be in the Definitions list and KEYMAT, > which I assume just is short for "keying material", should be expanded > on first use in Section 6.3. Alternatively, you could just replace all > occurrences of KEYMAT with "Keying Material". > > Section 5.3.2, page 23. The first sentence of the first paragraph > starting on that page has problems. Maybe "chose" should be "choses" > but I'm not sure: > "The DH_GROUP_LIST parameter contains the Responder's order of > preference based on which the Responder chose the ECDH key contained > in the HOST_ID parameter (see below)." > > Appendix A, first sentence, "allows to identify" -> "allows identifying" > > Appendix B, "IEDG" -> "IESG" > > Appendix B, around the middle of page 51, right after the line > beginning with "Section 6," there are three line with a blank line > before and after. I found this confusing at first. I suggest those > three line also be indented. > > Appendix B, page 52, "SHOUDS" -> "SHOUDs" > > Thanks, > Donald > =============================== > Donald E. Eastlake 3rd +1-508-333-2270 (cell) > 2386 Panoramic Circle, Apopka, FL 32703 USA > d3e3e3@gmail.com > > >
- [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-11 Donald Eastlake
- Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-… Eric Vyncke (evyncke)
- Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-… Donald Eastlake
- Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-… Robert Moskowitz
- Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-… Robert Moskowitz
- Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-… Donald Eastlake
- Re: [secdir] SECDIR Reveiw of draft-ietf-hip-dex-… Robert Moskowitz