[secdir] secdir review of draft-leiba-3777upd-eligibility-05

Glen Zorn <glenzorn@gmail.com> Tue, 11 December 2012 08:19 UTC

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I have reviewed this document as part of the security directorate's
ongoing effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the
IESG.  These comments were written primarily for the benefit of the
security area directors.  Document editors and WG chairs should treat
these comments just like any other last call comments.

*Editorial Comments*
_Section 1_
s/to understand of the IETF process/to understand the IETF process/
s/ex-officio members liaisons/ex-officio members, liaisons/