[Acme] Éric Vyncke's Discuss on draft-ietf-acme-authority-token-tnauthlist-08: (with DISCUSS and COMMENT)

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Subject: [Acme] Éric Vyncke's Discuss on draft-ietf-acme-authority-token-tnauthlist-08: (with DISCUSS and COMMENT)

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DISCUSS:
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Thank you for the work put into this document.

Please find below one blocking DISCUSS point (but trivial to fix), some
non-blocking COMMENT points (but replies would be appreciated even if only for
my own education).

Special thanks to Rich Salz for the shepherd's write-up about the WG consensus
(and I noted the mix of STIR & ACME).

I hope that this helps to improve the document,

Regards,

-éric

== DISCUSS ==

A very trivial one: please use the more recent BCP14 template (incl. RFC 8174)
;-)


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COMMENT:
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== COMMENTS ==

Feel free to ignore but a small ASCII ART / SVG describing the interactions
between all components would help the reader to understand the whole process.

-- Section 3 --
Is "TN" a well-known acronym ? Please expand it at first use (even if I guess
that "TN" stands for telephone number).

-- Section 5.4 --
s/which shall be 'SHA256'/which MUST be 'SHA256'/ ?

-- Section 5.7 --
Please expand "SPC", "OCN" on first use. As "SPID" is in
https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt, its expansion is not
mandatory but would be welcome.

-- Section 6 --
In "then the CA MUST set the challenge object "status" to "valid"", isn't it up
to the ACME server to do this action ?

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