Re: [Anima] FW: New Version Notification for draft-behringer-anima-reference-model-00.txt

["Jonathan Hansford" <[e-mail]>]

Hi,

 

I know you are looking for high level comments, but I'm just getting my head
round the goals of anima and have some low level editorial comments. Hope
you don't mind:

*         Section 2, MASA: 

o   Is MASA an acronym? I assume the ASA stands for Autonomic Service Agent,
but I could be wrong. 

o   s/The MASA is service/The MASA is a service

*         Section 3: I just don't understand the 2nd sentence. Is it trying
to say that section 2 describes the "boxes"? If so, wouldn't it be better to
say 'Section 2, The Network View, describes the "boxes".'? Or are you trying
to say section 3 describes the boxes identified in section 2? Is the intent
to have a diagram in section 2 that has boxes, lines and arrows (see section
7)?

*         Section 3.1: 

o   This states there are two levels inside an autonomic node but then only
appears to mention one: 'the level of autonomic service agents'. Is the
other level the autonomic networking infrastructure? If so, perhaps it could
say 'Fundamentally, there are two levels inside an autonomic node: that of
the autonomic service agents and that of the autonomic networking
infrastructure, with the former using the functions of the latter.'

o   Though "Intent" is capitalised in this section, it isn't anywhere else
(figure 1 and section 7.3). I presume in each case this is a reference to
Intent as defined in draft-irtf-nmrg-autonomic-network-definitions, in which
case drawing the definition through and capitalising throughout might be a
good idea.

*         Section 7: 

o   Again, a confusing reference to section 2. 

o   Do you mean the "summary" of autonomic interactions forms the ACP?
Summary doesn't feel like the right word. Might "totality" be better?

*         Section 7.1: 

o   You identify information as being provided through configuration or
northbound interfaces and indicate autonomic functions should only minimally
rely on the interfaces. Does that imply a greater reliance on configuration,
or should it minimally rely on both configuration and the interfaces? 

o   s/neigbhour/neighbour

*         Section 9.1: s/in theory by attempted/in theory be attempted

 

Jonathan

 

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> Subject: [Anima] FW: New Version Notification for draft-behringer-anima-

> reference-model-00.txt

> 

> Here the first version of the reference draft. The sections need a lot
more

> work, but the structure should be a good starting point. Before diving
into

> the details (where we'll have no doubt lots of detailed comments), I'd
like to

> ask specifically about high level comments regarding structure, what is

> missing, etc.

> 

> Michael

> 

> 

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> > Behringer (mbehring); Toerless Eckert (eckert); Brian Carpenter;

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> > Subject: New Version Notification for draft-behringer-anima-reference-

> > model-00.txt

> >

> >

> > A new version of I-D, draft-behringer-anima-reference-model-00.txt

> > has been successfully submitted by Michael H. Behringer and posted to

> > the IETF repository.

> >

> > Name:                           draft-behringer-anima-reference-model

> > Revision:      00

> > Title:                               A Reference Model for Autonomic
Networking

> > Document date:        2014-10-17

> > Group:                          Individual Submission

> > Pages:                           9

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> >

> > Abstract:

> >    This document describes a reference model for Autonomic Networking.

> >    The goal is to define how the various elements in an autonomic

> >    context work together, to describe their interfaces and relations.

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