Re: [apps-discuss] Apps area review: draft-ietf-geopriv-rfc3825bis-14
Claudio Allocchio <Claudio.Allocchio@garr.it> Thu, 02 December 2010 07:59 UTC
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Subject: Re: [apps-discuss] Apps area review: draft-ietf-geopriv-rfc3825bis-14
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On Wed, 1 Dec 2010, Vijay K. Gurbani wrote: > I have been selected as the Applications Area Review Team reviewer for > this draft (for background on apps-review, please see > http://www.apps.ietf.org/content/applications-area-review-team). ?? some misreading of assignment? I did the review of draft-ietf-geopriv-rfc3825bis-14 yesterday. :-) you were suppoused to review this one: 1. <https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-sipcore-event-rate-control/>: Session Initiation Protocol (SIP) Event Notification Extension for Notification Rate Control Assigned to Vijay Gurbani Anyhow... additional nits also for draft-ietf-geopriv-rfc3825bis-14 are always welcome... but now draft-ietf-sipcore-event-rate-control needs a review. ;-) Claudio > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments > you may receive. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd > or AD before posting a new version of the draft. > > Document: draft-ietf-geopriv-rfc3825bis-14 > Title: Dynamic Host Configuration Protocol Options for > Coordinate-based Location Configuration Information > Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani > Review Date: Dec-1-2010 > IETF Last Call Date: Not known > IESG Telechat Date: Dec-2-2010 > Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard. > I have some nits that could possibly be addressed. > > Nits: > > 1) S1: s/has a range of/is useful for a range of/ > > 2) In S1, the phrase "where retrieving it might be difficult > in practice" --- what is it qualifying? The fact that the > information is stored on the end device? or the fact that > location information is stored somewhere else on the network? > I suspect it is the latter, but just wanted to make sure. > > It could possibly be reworded as: > > OLD: > An important feature of this specification is that after the relevant > DHCP exchanges have taken place, the location information is stored > on the end device rather than somewhere else, where retrieving it > might be difficult in practice. > NEW: > An important feature of this specification is that after the relevant > DHCP exchanges have taken place, the location information is stored > on the end device rather than somewhere else. Storing this > information at a place other than the end device makes retrieving it > difficult in practice. > > 3) S1.2, suggested re-write: > s/In this document, each of the three axes can be/In this document, > each of the three axes --- Latitude, Longitude and Altitude --- can be/ > > Thanks, > > - vijay > -- > Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent > 1960 Lucent Lane, Rm. 9C-533, Naperville, Illinois 60566 (USA) > Email: vkg@{alcatel-lucent.com,bell-labs.com,acm.org} > Web: http://ect.bell-labs.com/who/vkg/ > _______________________________________________ > apps-discuss mailing list > apps-discuss@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/apps-discuss > ------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Claudio Allocchio G A R R Claudio.Allocchio@garr.it Senior Technical Officer tel: +39 040 3758523 Italian Academic and G=Claudio; S=Allocchio; fax: +39 040 3758565 Research Network P=garr; A=garr; C=it; PGP Key: http://www.cert.garr.it/PGP/keys.php3#ca
- [apps-discuss] Apps area review: draft-ietf-geopr… Vijay K. Gurbani
- Re: [apps-discuss] Apps area review: draft-ietf-g… Claudio Allocchio