Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9537 <draft-ietf-regext-rdap-redacted-16> for your review
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9537 <draft-ietf-regext-rdap-redacted-16> for your review
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Authors, While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. 1) <!--[rfced] To clarify the second half of the sentence below, may we update it as follows? Original: The JSONPath expressions in the examples are for illustration purposes with single-role entities and the exact expressions to use by the server is out-of-scope. Perhaps: The JSONPath expressions in the examples are for illustration purposes with single-role entities, and the exact expressions to be used by the server are out of scope. --> 2) <!--[rfced] May we reorder the references in this sentence for easier readability as shown below? Original: An example is the vCard [RFC6350] "ADR" property / jCard [RFC7095] "adr" property that defines a sequence of address components. Perhaps: An example is the vCard "ADR" property [RFC6350], or the jCard "adr" property [RFC7095], which defines a sequence of address components. --> 3) <!--[rfced] Since "RFC 7095" is referenced for "jCard" in Section 3, is it necessary to reference "RFC 7095" each time "jCard" is used thereafter as it affects readability when there are multiple references within one sentence or in close proximity. Please let us know if "[RFC7095]" (from instances of "jCard [RFC7095]") may be removed after the first mention in Section 3. If that is not desired, may we update the sentences that contain multiple mentions to include only one mention as shown below? Please let us know your preference. Some examples: Original: The empty jCard [RFC7095] values ("" or null) are referenced in the "redacted" member in place of the jCard [RFC7095] property name in a array, such as referencing the "fn" jCard [RFC7095] property value at position 3 instead of referencing the "fn" jCard property name at position 0. Perhaps: The empty jCard [RFC7095] values ("" or null) are referenced in the "redacted" member in place of the jCard property name in an array, such as referencing the "fn" jCard property value at position 3 instead of referencing the "fn" jCard property name at position 0. ... Original: For example, removal of an individual data field in jCard [RFC7095] will result in a non-conformant jCard [RFC7095] array definition. Perhaps: For example, removal of an individual data field in jCard will result in a non-conformant jCard array definition [RFC7095]. ... Original: Reference index 0 of the jCard [RFC7095] property array, which is the jCard [RFC7095] "name" property, with a filter expression containing the name of the field, when redacting a jCard [RFC7095] field using the Redaction by Removal Method (Section 3.1). Perhaps: Reference index 0 of the jCard [RFC7095] property array, which is the jCard "name" property, with a filter expression containing the name of the field, when redacting a jCard field using the Redaction by Removal Method (Section 3.1). --> 4) <!--[rfced] Per usage in RFC 7095 and throughout the document, may we make "Text" lowercase? Original: The Redaction by Empty Value Method is when a redacted field is not removed, but its value is set to an empty value, such as "" for a jCard [RFC7095] Text ("text") property or null for a non-Text property. Perhaps: The Redaction by Empty Value Method is when a redacted field is not removed but its value is set to an empty value, such as "" for a jCard [RFC7095] text ("text") property or null for a non-text property. --> 5) <!--[rfced] We note that Figures 2, 6, 7, 8, 9, and 10 include introductory text that repeats the information stated in their titles. To avoid redundancy, may we remove the introductory text for the figures listed? --> 6) <!--[rfced] As RFC 7095 does not have its figures numbered, may we update "Figure 15" to be "Section 3.3.1.3" instead? Original: An example of the "label" jCard property in Figure 15 of [RFC7095] that redacts "123 Maple Ave\nSuite 901\n": ... An example of the "redacted" member for the redacted "label" jCard property value, based on Figure 15 of [RFC7095]: Perhaps: An example of the "label" jCard property in Section 3.3.1.3 of [RFC7095] that redacts "123 Maple Ave\nSuite 901\n": ... An example of the "redacted" member for the redacted "label" jCard property value, based on Section 3.3.1.3 of [RFC7095]: --> 7) <!-- [rfced] We have included some specific questions about the IANA text below. In addition to responding to those questions, please review all of the IANA-related updates carefully and let us know if any further updates are needed. a) Section 6.1. In the "RDAP Extensions" registry under the "redacted" value, the Contact is listed as "IESG" in this document; however, it is listed as "IETF" in the IANA registry at "https://www.iana.org/assignments/rdap-extensions". For consistency, should this document be updated to reflect "IETF", or should the IANA registry be updated to reflect "IESG"? Current (Section 6.1): Contact: IESG <iesg@ietf.org> b) Section 6.2. In the "RDAP JSON Values" registry under the Description for "jsonpath", this document references "draft-ietf-jsonpath-base" ("RFC 9535") but IANA references this document (see "https://www.iana.org/assignments/ rdap-json-values/"). Please confirm which document should be listed, and we will update this specification or the IANA registry accordingly. Original (Section 6.2): Description: JSON path expression language, as defined in draft-ietf-jsonpath-base. --> 8) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online Style Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> and let us know if any changes are needed. For example, please consider whether "whitespace" should be updated. --> Thank you. RFC Editor/ap/kc On Mar 8, 2024, at 2:16 PM, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org wrote: *****IMPORTANT***** Updated 2024/03/08 RFC Author(s): -------------- Instructions for Completing AUTH48 Your document has now entered AUTH48. 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Carney WG Chair(s) : James Galvin, Antoin Verschuren Area Director(s) : Murray Kucherawy, Francesca Palombini
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