Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9529 <draft-ietf-lake-traces-09> for your review
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Subject: Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9529 <draft-ietf-lake-traces-09> for your review
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Authors, While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. 1) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> 2) <!--[rfced] FYI, to match usage in [RFC9528], we have updated "static-ephemeral" to "ephemeral-static" for consistency. Please let us know if this is not accurate. Original: The endpoints use NIST P-256 [SP-800-186] for both ephemeral-ephemeral and static-ephemeral Diffie-Hellman key exchange. Current: The endpoints use NIST P-256 [SP-800-186] for both ephemeral-ephemeral and ephemeral-static Diffie-Hellman key exchange. --> 3) <!--[rfced] The following lines are not complete sentences. Please review and let us know if/how they should be updated. Original (Section 3.4): The Responder's static Diffie-Hellman P-256 key pair: Original (Section 3.5): The Initiator's static Diffie-Hellman P-256 key pair: --> 4) <!--[rfced] In Sections 2.2, 2.5, 3.4, 3.5, 3.7, and 3.9, it seems there are extraneous equals signs. Please review. For example, should the second equals sign on the PRK_exporter line and PRK_out line be removed (see c and d below)? a) Original: PRK_2e = EDHOC_Extract( salt, G_XY ) = = HMAC-SHA-256( salt, G_XY ) Perhaps: PRK_2e = EDHOC_Extract( salt, G_XY ) = HMAC-SHA-256( salt, G_XY ) b) Original: (appears in Sections 2.2 and 3.4) KEYSTREAM_2 = EDHOC_KDF( PRK_2e, 0, TH_2, plaintext_length ) = = HKDF-Expand( PRK_2e, info, plaintext_length ) Perhaps: KEYSTREAM_2 = EDHOC_KDF( PRK_2e, 0, TH_2, plaintext_length ) = HKDF-Expand( PRK_2e, info, plaintext_length ) c) Original: (appears in 3.7 and 3.9) PRK_exporter = EDHOC_KDF( PRK_out, 10, h'', hash_length ) = = HKDF-Expand( PRK_out, info, hash_length ) Perhaps: PRK_exporter = EDHOC_KDF( PRK_out, 10, h'', hash_length ) = HKDF-Expand( PRK_out, info, hash_length ) d) Original: (appears in 2.5 and 3.7) PRK_out = EDHOC_KDF( PRK_4e3m, 7, TH_4, hash_length ) = = HKDF-Expand( PRK_4e3m, info, hash_length ) Perhaps: PRK_out = EDHOC_KDF( PRK_4e3m, 7, TH_4, hash_length ) = HKDF-Expand( PRK_4e3m, info, hash_length ) e) Original: OSCORE Master Secret = = HKDF-Expand(PRK_exporter, info, oscore_key_length) Perhaps: OSCORE Master Secret = HKDF-Expand(PRK_exporter, info, oscore_key_length) f) See more examples in Section 3.5: SALT_4e3m and PRK_4e3m --> 5) <!--[rfced] The first lines of Sections 4.1.1-4.1.7, 4.2.1-4.2.6, 4.3.1, and 4.3.2 are not complete sentences. Please review these instances and let us know how they may be updated. --> 6) <!--[rfced] Citations a) Section 4.1.2 - "0e" is not mentioned in Section 3.3.2 of RFC 9528. (Please refer to https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9528.html or the other formats.) Please review and let us know if/how the citation may be updated. Original: Correct encoding is 0e according to Section 3.3.2 of [I-D.ietf-lake-edhoc]. b) Section 4.1.3 - "02" is not mentioned in Section 5.2.2 of RFC 9528. Please review and let us know if/how the citation may be updated. Original: Correct encoding is 02 according to Section 5.2.2 of [I-D.ietf-lake-edhoc]. c) Section 4.1.5 - "correct number of elements" is not mentioned in Section 5.3.1 of RFC 9528. Please review and let us know if/how this citation may be updated. Original: Correct number of elements is 1 according to Section 5.3.1 of [I-D.ietf-lake-edhoc]. d) Section 4.2.2 - "x < p" is not mentioned in Section 9.2 of RFC 9528. Please let us know if/how this citation may be updated. Original: Requirement that x < p according to Section 9.2 of [I-D.ietf-lake-edhoc] and Section 5.6.2.3 of [SP-800-56A]. e) Section 4.2.3 - "y^2 ≡ x^3 + a ⋅ x + b (mod p)" is not mentioned in Section 9.2 of RFC 9528. Please let us know if/how this citation may be updated. Original: Requirement that y^2 ≡ x^3 + a ⋅ x + b (mod p) according to Section 9.2 of [I-D.ietf-lake-edhoc] and Section 5.6.2.3 of [SP-800-56A]. f) Section 4.2.6 - "leading zeros" is not mentioned in Section 3.7 of RFC 9528. Please review and let us know if/how this citation may be updated. Original: Correct encoding is with leading zeros according to Section 3.7 of [I-D.ietf-lake-edhoc] and Section 7.1.1 of [RFC9053]. g) Section 4.3.2 - "82 06 02" is not mentioned in Section 5.2.2 of RFC 9528. Please review and let us know if/how this citation may be updated. Original: Correct encoding is 82 06 02 according to Section 5.2.2 of [I-D.ietf-lake-edhoc]. --> 7) <!--[rfced] The first paragraphs of Sections 4.2.2 and 4.2.3 are made up of incomplete sentences. Please review and let us know how they may be updated. Original (Section 4.2.2): Invalid x-coordinate in G_X as x ≥ p. Requirement that x < p according to Section 9.2 of [I-D.ietf-lake-edhoc] and Section 5.6.2.3 of [SP-800-56A]. Original (Section 4.2.3): Invalid x-coordinate in (G_X) not corresponding to a point on the P-256 curve. Requirement that y^2 ≡ x^3 + a ⋅ x + b (mod p) according to Section 9.2 of [RFC9528] and Section 5.6.2.3 of [SP-800-56A]. --> 8) <!--[rfced] To improve readability, may we update this sentence as follows? Original: Correct is the deterministic encoding 03 according to Section 3.1 of [I-D.ietf-lake-edhoc] and Section 4.2.1 of [RFC8949], which states that the arguments for integers, lengths in major types 2 through 5, and tags are required to be as short as possible. Perhaps: The deterministic encoding 03 is correct according to Section 3.1 of [RFC9528] and Section 4.2.1 of [RFC8949], which states that the arguments for integers, lengths in major types 2 through 5, and tags are required to be as short as possible. --> 9) <!--[rfced] FYI, we have moved one name in order to alphabetize the names in the Acknowledgments because that seemed to have been your intention. Please let us know if you prefer otherwise. --> 10) <!-- [rfced] FYI - We have added expansions for the following abbreviations per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"). Please review each expansion in the document carefully to ensure correctness. Authenticated Encryption with Associated Data (AEAD) Concise Binary Object Representation (CBOR) Constrained Application Protocol (CoAP) CBOR Object Signing and Encryption (COSE) Diffie-Hellman (DH) Elliptic Curve Diffie-Hellman (ECDH) Edwards-curve Digital Signature Algorithm (EdDSA) Message Authentication Code (MAC) Object Security for Constrained RESTful Environments (OSCORE) --> 11) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online Style Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> and let us know if any changes are needed. For example, please consider whether "master" should be updated. --> Thank you. RFC Editor/ap/ar On Feb 29, 2024, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org wrote: *****IMPORTANT***** Updated 2024/02/29 RFC Author(s): -------------- Instructions for Completing AUTH48 Your document has now entered AUTH48. Once it has been reviewed and approved by you and all coauthors, it will be published as an RFC. 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