Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft-ietf-tsvwg-l4s-arch-20> for your review
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Subject: Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft-ietf-tsvwg-l4s-arch-20> for your review
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LGTM On Thu, Nov 3, 2022 at 4:35 PM Bob Briscoe <ietf@bobbriscoe.net> wrote: > Gorry, Martin, > > This was not easy, but I think I've sorted it and kept the sentences > short. I wanted to lose the 'Networks sometimes do not trust' from Martin's > proposal, > which I felt reintroduced the problem Gorry was trying to avoid, namely > asserting this occurs sometimes, rather than often. I also took Gorry's > theme one step further, and tried to move away from saying anything about > users having a choice, because networks might make the choice for them: > > In particular, if networks do not trust end systems to > identify which > packets should be favoured, they assign packets to Diffserv > classes > themselves. However, the techniques available to such > networks, like > inspection of flow identifiers or deeper inspection of > application > signatures, do not always sit well with encryption of the > layers above > IP <xref target="RFC8404" format="default"/>. In these cases, > users > can have either privacy or Quality of Service (QoS), but not > both. > > Next email, I'll send (the XML with other changes too) to the RFC Editor. > > Bob > > > On 03/11/2022 18:05, Martin Duke wrote: > > I'm fine with the substantive proposal here (and hereby approve them all), > though I don't like the really long sentences. how about: > > "Networks sometimes do not trust end systems to identify packets to be > favored via Diffserv. They might instead inspect application flow > identifiers > or signatures to assign Diffserv classes. However, this technique is not > robust to encryption of layers above IP [RFC8404], which can result in > a choice between privacy and Quality of Service (QoS)" > > This is a suggestion; if I've mangled it somehow, I preemptively approve > Bob's wordsmithing. > > On Thu, Nov 3, 2022 at 9:59 AM Bob Briscoe <ietf@bobbriscoe.net> wrote: > >> Gorry, >> >> Your suggested text seems do-able. I'll write it in, then leave Martin >> to decide. >> >> >> Bob >> >> On 03/11/2022 09:22, Gorry Fairhurst wrote: >> > Bob, I'm aware this is AUTH48, so the AD decides, and that's the way >> > it should be, but I did say soemthing and I think it could be clearer >> > so see [GF] below. >> > >> > On 03/11/2022 00:14, Bob Briscoe wrote: >> >> Gorry, See [BB3] >> >> >> >> On 02/11/2022 21:50, Gorry Fairhurst wrote: >> >>> On 02/11/2022 21:32, Alice Russo wrote: >> >>>> Bob, Martin (as AD), >> >>>> >> >>>> *Martin, please review and let us know if you approve the change in >> >>>> Section 5.2. >> >>>> Specifically: >> >>>> Original: >> >>>> In particular, because networks tend not to trust end >> >>>> systems to >> >>>> identify which packets should be favoured over others, where >> >>>> networks assign packets to Diffserv classes they tend to use >> >>>> packet inspection of application flow identifiers or deeper >> >>>> inspection of application signatures. >> >>>> >> >>>> Current: >> >>>> In particular, networks often use packet inspection of >> >>>> application >> >>>> flow identifiers or deeper inspection of application >> >>>> signatures to >> >>>> assign packets to Diffserv classes, because they tend not to >> >>>> trust >> >>>> end systems to identify which packets should be favoured over >> >>>> others. >> >>>> >> >>>> From Bob: >> >>>>> Reason: This is an explanation of why networks prefer to >> >>>>> themselves assign packets to Diffserv classes, so restricting it >> >>>>> to "where networks assign packets to Diffserv classes" was >> >>>>> inappropriate. >> >>> >> >>> Martin, >> >>> >> >>> I hope "networks often use" and the later "Diffserv doesn't always >> >>> sit well with encryption of the layers above" in the same para can >> >>> not be used to imply IETF consensus. I'm not convinced a para is >> >>> necessary to criticise diffserv in favour of L4S and if kept I still >> >>> hold with my comment that this seems para is something we need to >> >>> carefully check. >> >> >> >> [BB3] I think you're not saying that this text is technically >> >> incorrect, just that you'd rather it wasn't stated. As explained >> >> before, the purpose of this whole section was to justify why the IETF >> >> needs to assign an experimental codepoint in the IP header for L4S, >> >> by explaining what is different from the various technologies that >> >> we've already got that attempt to address similar problems. >> >> >> >> The reason for this latest change was purely editorial, because >> >> "where networks assign packets to Diffserv classes" was in the wrong >> >> position in the logical flow (as explained above under 'Reason'). >> >> >> >> Would it help to change 'networks often use' to 'networks tend to >> >> use'? I chose 'often' 'cos I thought it was synonymous with 'tend >> >> to'. But if we go with 'tend to', then this, and the later "Diffserv >> >> doesn't always sit well with encryption of the layers above" would be >> >> no different to the text on this point resulting from the WG >> >> processing of this draft (introduced in draft-07 in Oct 2020). >> >> >> >> >> >> Bob >> >> >> >> >> > [GF] I am saying that I am unconfortable with any text infering what >> > networks "typically" or are "allowed" to do, unless that has been a >> > focus of the WG. This particular topic is sensitive to some in the IETF. >> > >> > Mea culpa, I should have been expressive earlier and have made a >> > suggestion then, SORRY! >> > >> > **IF** some change is possible, I'd recommend a more neutral tone of >> > voice, so that instead of saying this often/typically/whatever is >> > done. That is, describe the actual implication, without discussing its >> > prevelence or implying good/bad practice in this document. >> > >> > e.g. for this para I would have suggested something like: >> > >> > "Networks that do not trust the end systems to identify the set of >> > that packets should be favoured over others are unable to use packet >> > inspection of application flow identifiers or deeper inspection of >> > application signatures to assign packets to Diffserv classes when this >> > information is encrypted. In this case, Diffserv does not sit well >> > with encryption of the layers above IP [RFC8404], which can result in >> > a choice between privacy and Quality of Service (QoS)" >> > >> > Please consider and liaise with others if it is OK to make any >> > improvements - I do not have a formal role, so the AD is responsible >> > for approving any change. >> > >> > ver best wishes, >> > >> > Gorry >> > >> >>> >> >>> Best wishes, >> >>> Gorry >> >>>> My apologies for the delayed reply. Thank you for sending the >> >>>> updated XML file. >> >>>> The revised files are here (please refresh): >> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330.html >> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330.txt >> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330.pdf >> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330.xml >> >>>> >> >>>> This diff file shows all changes from the approved I-D: >> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330-diff.html >> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330-rfcdiff.html (side by >> >>>> side) >> >>>> >> >>>> This diff file shows the changes made during AUTH48 thus far: >> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330-auth48diff.html >> >>>> >> >>>> This diff file shows only the changes since the last posted version: >> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330-lastrfcdiff.html >> >>>> >> >>>> >> >>>> Re: >> >>>>> [RFCYYY2] & [RFCYYY1]: I've presumed that the new expansion of L4S >> >>>>> will be used in their titles and therefore their references. >> >>>> >> >>>> Yes; correct. >> >>>> >> >>>> >> >>>> Re: >> >>>>> DOCSIS(R) not DOCSIS(r) isn't it? >> >>>>> BTW, I originally used '®' in the XML, but I presume it was >> >>>>> removed for a good reason (?). >> >>>> That's fine. We had relied on the citation library, which uses >> >>>> "(r)" >> >>>> ( >> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/bibxml3/reference.I-D.briscoe-docsis-q-protection.xml >> ). >> >>>> Regarding the title of draft-briscoe-docsis-q-protection, we note >> >>>> that "DOCSIS" has appeared in the titles of several RFCs without >> >>>> the ® symbol. We note _The Chicago Manual of Style_ (8.153 >> >>>> Trademarks) states these symbols should be left out: >> >>>> "Although the symbols ® and ™ (for registered and unregistered >> >>>> trademarks, respectively) often accompany trademark names on >> >>>> product packaging and in promotional material, there is no legal >> >>>> requirement to use these symbols, and they should be omitted >> >>>> wherever possible." >> >>>> >> >>>> Re: >> >>>>> 'over specified' >> >>>>> This still seems wrong to me (and others I've consulted with). >> >>>>> Could you pls provide rationale for this and why it should not be >> >>>>> 'over-specified'? >> >>>> >> >>>> Agree; reverted to "over-specified". >> >>>> >> >>>> We will wait to hear from you again and from your coauthors >> >>>> before continuing the publication process. This page shows >> >>>> the AUTH48 status of your document: >> >>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9330 >> >>>> >> >>>> Thank you. >> >>>> RFC Editor/ar >> >>>> >> >>>>> On Oct 28, 2022, at 5:35 AM, Bob Briscoe <ietf@bobbriscoe.net> >> wrote: >> >>>>> >> >>>>> Alanna, >> >>>>> >> >>>>> Assuming my most recent changes (in the attached XML) are >> >>>>> uncontroversial, I believe there is just one outstanding >> >>>>> disagreement ('over specify', which I have left for you to change >> >>>>> if you agree with me). >> >>>>> I've also attached two diffs: i) wrt your last XML and ii) wrt the >> >>>>> previously submitted draft-20. >> >>>>> >> >>>>> Pls see [BB] inline for numerous responses. >> >>>>> >> >>>>> On 26/10/2022 00:28, Alanna Paloma wrote: >> >>>>>> Hi Bob, >> >>>>>> >> >>>>>> >> >>>>>>> 1) US-English Punctuation >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> As well as all my errors that you have found (for which many >> >>>>>>> thanks), I notice some alterations that I would categorize as >> >>>>>>> translations into US English punctuation. >> >>>>>>> I've let them all pass where the US English is at least not >> >>>>>>> incorrect in British English. However, the following (a-d) are >> >>>>>>> definitely incorrect in British English: >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>> We have not made these updates. While the RFCs may use British >> >>>>>> spelling (when it’s used consistently), we generally follow the >> >>>>>> RFC Style Guide and Chicago Manual of Style. >> >>>>> [BB] I won't pursue this any further. You've reverted to >> >>>>> semi-colons where it had become ambiguous, which was my main >> >>>>> concern. And you've balanced commas around qualifying clauses, >> >>>>> which makes me happier. Serial commas and commas after 'e.g.' or >> >>>>> 'i.e.' still create internal inconsistency with the British >> >>>>> spellings, thus making it look like I don't know how to punctuate >> >>>>> British English properly (given my name is on this as editor). >> >>>>> However, from discussing offline, I've discovered that the >> >>>>> preference for punctuation consistency across RFCs over internal >> >>>>> consistency is a fairly recent change of policy. No matter how >> >>>>> controversial, I understand that this isn't the place to fight the >> >>>>> RFC Editor's style policy. >> >>>>> >> >>>>>> For our understanding, what British style manual are you using? >> >>>>> [BB] As I said, I intended not to question any edits that are >> >>>>> merely questions of style. I only raised points that I believe are >> >>>>> universally considered incorrect in British English whatever the >> >>>>> style (or at least near-universally). >> >>>>> >> >>>>> I have read Fowler's Modern English Usage, so I guess one could >> >>>>> say I follow that. Plus I check StackExchange for latest advice >> >>>>> and trends. Nonetheless, Fowler himself preferred the serial comma >> >>>>> but recognized that he was out on a limb, admitting that "many >> >>>>> other [British] publishers" omit it. AFAIK, the OUP is the only >> >>>>> major British publisher that requires it, which is why Brits call >> >>>>> it the Oxford comma. >> >>>>> >> >>>>>>> 2) Expansions of Abbreviations >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> The editor has expanded protocol abbreviations on first use as a >> >>>>>>> universal rule. However, I would argue that each case has to be >> >>>>>>> treated on its merits, rather than applying a universal style >> rule. >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>> We have reverted these expansions. Note that we have added >> >>>>>> corresponding references at the first occurrences of “SCTP” and >> >>>>>> “DCCP” (RFC 4960 and 4340, respectively). >> >>>>> [BB] Thank you. Adding citations is a useful compromise. >> >>>>> Nonetheless, it looks odd to have citations for only these two but >> >>>>> not TCP and QUIC. So I have added citations for them too (they >> >>>>> were already cited, so they're not new refs). >> >>>>> >> >>>>>>> 3) XML coding >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> Shouldn't '--' be replaced with – in the XML, which would >> >>>>>>> produce '--' in the txt but a correct n-width dash in the HTML >> >>>>>>> and PDF? >> >>>>>>> (I had inconsistently used — or a single hyphen, but it's >> >>>>>>> fine to instead use n-dashes consistently) >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>> RFCs use the character HYPHEN-MINUS (decimal 45; U+002D). They do >> >>>>>> not use en dash (U+2013) or em dash (U+2014). In general, >> >>>>>> non-ASCII characters are not used for punctuation. >> >>>>> [BB] Understood. Fair enough. >> >>>>> >> >>>>>> >> >>>>>> Additionally, to improve clarity, may we update this sentence in >> >>>>>> Section 1.1 as follows? >> >>>>>> >> >>>>>> Current: >> >>>>>> Having described the architecture, Section 6 clarifies its >> >>>>>> applicability, that is, the applications and use cases that >> >>>>>> motivated >> >>>>>> the design, the challenges applying the architecture to >> >>>>>> various link >> >>>>>> technologies, and various incremental deployment models, >> >>>>>> including >> >>>>>> the two main deployment topologies, different sequences for >> >>>>>> incremental deployment, and various interactions with >> preexisting >> >>>>>> approaches. >> >>>>>> >> >>>>>> Perhaps: >> >>>>>> After the architecture has been described, Section 6 clarifies >> >>>>>> its >> >>>>>> applicability by describing the applications and use cases >> >>>>>> that motivated >> >>>>>> the design, the challenges applying the architecture to >> >>>>>> various link >> >>>>>> technologies, and various incremental deployment models >> >>>>>> (including >> >>>>>> the two main deployment topologies, different sequences for >> >>>>>> incremental deployment, and various interactions with >> preexisting >> >>>>>> approaches). >> >>>>>> >> >>>>> [BB] Yes, that's better. I've included it in the XML for you. >> >>>>> >> >>>>>> ... >> >>>>>> The files have been posted here (please refresh): >> >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330.txt >> >>>>>> >> >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330.pdf >> >>>>>> >> >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330.html >> >>>>>> >> >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330.xml >> >>>>>> >> >>>>>> >> >>>>>> The relevant diff files are posted here: >> >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330-diff.html >> >>>>>> (comprehensive diff) >> >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330-auth48diff.html >> >>>>>> (all AUTH48 changes) >> >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330-lastdiff.html >> >>>>>> (htmlwdiff diff between last version and this) >> >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9330-lastrfcdiff.html >> >>>>>> (rfcdiff between last version and this) >> >>>>> [BB] On reading the diff over again, I've made a few minor >> >>>>> editorial changes that you will see in my new XML and new diff >> >>>>> (attached). I've highlighted one or two below that require some >> >>>>> explanation. >> >>>>> >> >>>>> Abstract: >> >>>>> CURRENT: >> >>>>> ...transition away from congestion control algorithms that >> cause >> >>>>> substantial queuing delay to a new class of congestion >> >>>>> controls... >> >>>>> PROPOSED: >> >>>>> ...transition away from congestion control algorithms that >> cause >> >>>>> substantial queuing delay and instead adopt a new class of >> >>>>> congestion controls... >> >>>>> Reason: >> >>>>> The reader could otherwise easily start misreading it as "...cause >> >>>>> queuing delay to a new class of congestion controls..." then >> >>>>> stumble when the end of the sentence becomes incompatible >> >>>>> >> >>>>> I've capitalized the 2nd occurrence of Accurate ECN, which I think >> >>>>> is better, even though I argued against the first one. >> >>>>> * 1st occurrence: more accurate ECN feedback for TCP (AccECN) >> >>>>> * 2nd occurrence: For TCP transports, Accurate ECN (AccECN) feedback >> >>>>> Reasoning: with the TCP part at the start, the abbreviation for >> >>>>> the whole concept (including its applicability solely to TCP) can >> >>>>> be written directly after the two words that form the >> >>>>> abbreviation. >> >>>>> But, pls feel free to alter if you think fit. >> >>>>> >> >>>>> CURRENT: >> >>>>> a flow of non-ECN or ECT(0) packets >> >>>>> >> >>>>> PROPOSED: >> >>>>> a flow of Not-ECT or ECT(0) packets >> >>>>> REASONING: One more occurrence where it refers to the codepoint. >> >>>>> >> >>>>> CURRENT (which was my newly proposed text but, on reflection, it >> >>>>> was still not right): >> >>>>> In particular, where networks assign packets to Diffserv >> >>>>> classes, >> >>>>> they tend to use packet inspection of application flow >> >>>>> identifiers >> >>>>> or deeper inspection of application signatures, because >> >>>>> networks >> >>>>> tend not to trust end systems to identify which packets >> >>>>> should be >> >>>>> favoured over others. >> >>>>> >> >>>>> PROPOSED >> >>>>> In particular, networks often use packet inspection of >> >>>>> application flow >> >>>>> identifiers or deeper inspection of application signatures >> >>>>> to assign >> >>>>> packets to Diffserv classes, because they tend not to trust >> >>>>> end >> >>>>> systems to identify which packets should be favoured over >> >>>>> others. >> >>>>> >> >>>>> Reason: This is an explanation of why networks prefer to >> >>>>> themselves assign packets to Diffserv classes, so restricting it >> >>>>> to "where networks assign packets to Diffserv classes" was >> >>>>> inappropriate. >> >>>>> >> >>>>> 'over specified' >> >>>>> This still seems wrong to me (and others I've consulted with). >> >>>>> Could you pls provide rationale for this and why it should not be >> >>>>> 'over-specified'? >> >>>>> I've left it for you to change if you agree with me. >> >>>>> >> >>>>> Here's the my comment about this that I've now removed from the XML: >> >>>>> <!-- [BB] 'Over specified' as 2 separate words looks like >> >>>>> 'over' is a >> >>>>> preposition, which seems very wrong. However, I >> >>>>> can't find >> >>>>> 'overspecify' or 'over-specify' in a formal >> >>>>> dictionary. Nonetheless, >> >>>>> surely it is a well-understood frequently invented >> >>>>> compound, much as >> >>>>> 'over-thank' or 'over-freeze' would be, even though >> >>>>> they are not >> >>>>> dictionary words either. So, as such, wouldn't it >> >>>>> either be written >> >>>>> hyphenated or as one word, never as two? >> >>>>> https://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/overspecify >> >>>>> https://www.yourdictionary.com/overspecify >> >>>>> STATUS: PENDING editor decision >> >>>>> (strongly prefer to revert please). >> >>>>> --> >> >>>>> >> >>>>> [RFCYYY2] & [RFCYYY1]: I've presumed that the new expansion of L4S >> >>>>> will be used in their titles and therefore their references. >> >>>>> >> >>>>> DOCSIS(R) not DOCSIS(r) isn't it? >> >>>>> BTW, I originally used '®' in the XML, but I presume it was >> >>>>> removed for a good reason (?). >> >>>>> >> >>>>> CURRENT: >> >>>>> random acts of kindness might occur. >> >>>>> PROPOSED: >> >>>>> random acts of kindness might arise. >> >>>>> Reason: For this newly added ending, I felt (IMO) 'arise' is a >> >>>>> slightly more fitting choice of word. >> >>>>> >> >>>>> I also removed the remaining [rfced] and [BB] comments from the XML. >> >>>>> >> >>>>> Regards >> >>>>> >> >>>>> >> >>>>> Bob >> >>>>> >> >>>>>> Please see the AUTH48 status page for this document here: >> >>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/auth48/rfc9330 >> >>>>>> >> >>>>>> >> >>>>>> Best regards, >> >>>>>> RFC Editor/ap >> >>>>>> >> >>>>>> >> >>>>>>> On Oct 21, 2022, at 7:56 AM, Bob Briscoe <ietf@bobbriscoe.net> >> >>>>>>> wrote: >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> Alanna, >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> Thank you for finding all my errors, and apologies for the delay >> >>>>>>> replying. >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> I have written all my responses to your '[rfced]' comments >> >>>>>>> within the XML (except one inline below, which was invalid >> >>>>>>> within an XML comment). >> >>>>>>> Where necessary, I have tried to fix any new problems within the >> >>>>>>> XML source directly, and added a comment tagged '[BB]' >> >>>>>>> explaining my reasoning. >> >>>>>>> I have also attached a side-by-side diff wrt the latest RFC9330 >> >>>>>>> XML that you sent me, just FYI. >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> In general, I have avoided reverting changes I disagree with, >> >>>>>>> preferring to ask you to revert them (in case you have a good >> >>>>>>> reason not to). But where I was sure of myself, I have reverted >> >>>>>>> some, and explained my reasoning in a comment. >> >>>>>>> I have ended each comment with one of the following status >> >>>>>>> lines, to make it clear what I am expecting to be done: >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> 03: STATUS: no further action required. >> >>>>>>> 38: STATUS: if agreeable to editor, no further action required. >> >>>>>>> 12: STATUS: PENDING editor decision. >> >>>>>>> 01: STATUS: PENDING editor suggestion. >> >>>>>>> 01: STATUS: PENDING editor check of corrected reference. >> >>>>>>> 02: STATUS: PENDING re-check by the editor. >> >>>>>>> ======= >> >>>>>>> 57: Total >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> Multiple Occurrences >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> There follow comments that apply to multiple occurrences, which >> >>>>>>> I have left for you to action. >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> 1) US-English Punctuation >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> As well as all my errors that you have found (for which many >> >>>>>>> thanks), I notice some alterations that I would categorize as >> >>>>>>> translations into US English punctuation. >> >>>>>>> I've let them all pass where the US English is at least not >> >>>>>>> incorrect in British English. However, the following (a-d) are >> >>>>>>> definitely incorrect in British English: >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> 1a) The use of the "Oxford comma" is consistent with US English, >> >>>>>>> but not British English (whether Oxford variant spelling or not). >> >>>>>>> By Oxford comma, I mean a comma before the last element of a >> >>>>>>> list, e.g. >> >>>>>>> home, small enterprise, or mobile >> >>>>>>> whereas in British English this is considered incorrect, not >> >>>>>>> just unusual, and the correct form is >> >>>>>>> home, small enterprise or mobile >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> I would appreciate the following cases being reverted back to >> >>>>>>> British English: >> >>>>>>> • ...home, small enterprise, or mobile >> >>>>>>> • ...cloud-based applications, and video-assisted remote >> >>>>>>> control of machinery and industrial processes >> >>>>>>> • ...low latency, low loss, and scalable Internet service. >> >>>>>>> • Last para of §1.1 Document Road Map (2 occurrences) >> >>>>>>> • ...[BBR-CON-CTRL], and the L4S variant of SCReAM >> >>>>>>> • ...'packet', and 'flow'. >> >>>>>>> • ...enterprise, or campus >> >>>>>>> • ...'burst policing', or 'queue protection' >> >>>>>>> • ...new service, product, and application opportunities. >> >>>>>>> • ...(adaptive) video streaming, and... >> >>>>>>> • ...senders, receivers, and networks >> >>>>>>> • ...real-time (RTP, RMCAT), and >> >>>>>>> • ...line of sight wireless, or satellite >> >>>>>>> • ...due to electrical interference, and... >> >>>>>>> • ...households, businesses, or mobile users >> >>>>>>> • ...receiver, sender, or network >> >>>>>>> • ...applicability, pros, and cons >> >>>>>>> • ...Pete Heist, and Martin Duke >> >>>>>>> • ...Roman Danyliw, and Éric Vyncke >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> 1b) Commas have been added after 'e.g.' and 'i.e.' This is >> >>>>>>> inconsistent with the British English spelling and grammar of >> >>>>>>> the rest of the document, only being correct in US English. >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> >> https://english.stackexchange.com/questions/16172/should-i-always-use-a-comma-after-e-g-or-i-e >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> 1c) I used semicolons to divide up lists of phrases, some of >> >>>>>>> which include a comma within the phrase. These semicolons have >> >>>>>>> been converted to commas, which is perhaps a US-english >> >>>>>>> tendency, whereas I believe that the semi-colon is used less >> >>>>>>> sparingly in British English. The result is less comprehensible, >> >>>>>>> whether for US or British English readers. So I would have >> >>>>>>> thought it best to have left well alone in these cases. >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> 1d) I notice a number of constructions with a qualifying clause >> >>>>>>> for a particular case like this "yada yada yada, but in >> >>>>>>> particular case X, bippety bippety boo." >> >>>>>>> In British English this would always be punctuated as "yada yada >> >>>>>>> yada but, in particular case X, bippety bippety boo." >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> 2) Expansions of Abbreviations >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> The editor has expanded protocol abbreviations on first use as a >> >>>>>>> universal rule. However, I would argue that each case has to be >> >>>>>>> treated on its merits, rather than applying a universal style >> rule. >> >>>>>>> Such expansions can make a sentence impenetrable. So, where the >> >>>>>>> protocols are generally known by their abbreviation, especially >> >>>>>>> where they are only mentioned in passing as examples, expansion >> >>>>>>> is counterproductive. Also, where a citation is given for a >> >>>>>>> well-known abbreviation, those (unusual) readers who don't >> >>>>>>> recognize the abbreviation can resort to looking up the >> >>>>>>> expansion in the references section. >> >>>>>>> 3) XML coding >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> Shouldn't '--' be replaced with – in the XML, which would >> >>>>>>> produce '--' in the txt but a correct n-width dash in the HTML >> >>>>>>> and PDF? >> >>>>>>> (I had inconsistently used — or a single hyphen, but it's >> >>>>>>> fine to instead use n-dashes consistently) >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> Pls also see one response to Q15a) tagged [BB] inline. >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> On 20/10/2022 22:36, Alanna Paloma wrote: >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Authors, >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Please note that the following queries remain unanswered. They >> >>>>>>>> can also be viewed in the XML file. >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that >> >>>>>>>> appear in the >> >>>>>>>> title) for use on >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> https://www.rfc-editor.org/search >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> . --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 3) <!--[rfced] We see "L4S" expanded in various ways within >> >>>>>>>> this document >> >>>>>>>> and related documents. Please let us know what the preferred >> >>>>>>>> expansion >> >>>>>>>> is, and we will update this document (title, abstract, and so >> >>>>>>>> forth) >> >>>>>>>> to use that expansion. >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> A) Low Latency, Low Loss, Scalable Throughput (L4S) (original >> >>>>>>>> title) >> >>>>>>>> B) Low queuing Latency, Low Loss, and Scalable throughput >> >>>>>>>> (L4S) (original abstract) >> >>>>>>>> C) Low-Latency, Low-Loss Scalable throughput (L4S) >> >>>>>>>> (Terminology section and [ECN-L4S]) >> >>>>>>>> D) low latency, low loss and scalable throughput (L4S) [ECN-L4S] >> >>>>>>>> E) Low Latency, Low Loss, Scalable throughput (L4S) [ECN-L4S] >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> In references: >> >>>>>>>> Low Latency Low Loss Scalable throughput (L4S) (RFC 8311) >> >>>>>>>> Low Loss, Low Latency for Scalable throughput (L4S) (RFC >> 8298) >> >>>>>>>> Low Latency, Low Loss and Scalable (L4S) [DualPI2Linux] >> >>>>>>>> --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 4) <!--[rfced] May the first sentence of the abstract be updated >> >>>>>>>> to use the expansion selected for the first instance of "L4S"? >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Original: >> >>>>>>>> This document describes the L4S architecture, which enables >> >>>>>>>> Internet >> >>>>>>>> applications to achieve Low queuing Latency, Low Loss, and >> >>>>>>>> Scalable >> >>>>>>>> throughput (L4S). >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Perhaps (depending on your answer to the preceding question): >> >>>>>>>> This document describes the Low-Latency, Low-Loss Scalable >> >>>>>>>> throughput >> >>>>>>>> (L4S) architecture, which enables Internet applications to >> >>>>>>>> achieve >> >>>>>>>> those goals. >> >>>>>>>> --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 5) <!--[rfced] We see a number of author-inserted comments in >> >>>>>>>> the XML file for >> >>>>>>>> this document. We are unsure if these have been resolved. >> >>>>>>>> Please review >> >>>>>>>> and let us know if these can be deleted or if they need to be >> >>>>>>>> addressed. >> >>>>>>>> --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 6) <!--[rfced] Should "not-ECT" be updated to "non-ECT" (3 >> >>>>>>>> instances)? >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Original: >> >>>>>>>> In addition, ECT(0) and not- >> >>>>>>>> ECT packets could potentially be classified into a separate >> >>>>>>>> flow- >> >>>>>>>> queue from ECT(1) and CE packets to avoid them mixing if they >> >>>>>>>> share a common flow-identifier (e.g. in a VPN). >> >>>>>>>> ... >> >>>>>>>> If they already treat ECN traffic as Not-ECT, >> >>>>>>>> they can merely treat L4S traffic as Not-ECT too. >> >>>>>>>> --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 7) <!--[rfced] Note that we have expanded "NIC" as "Network >> >>>>>>>> Interface Centre". >> >>>>>>>> Please review. >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Original: >> >>>>>>>> For example, >> >>>>>>>> some data-centre networks are designed with the bottleneck >> >>>>>>>> in the >> >>>>>>>> hypervisor or host NICs, while others bottleneck at the >> >>>>>>>> top-of-rack >> >>>>>>>> switch (both the output ports facing hosts and those facing >> the >> >>>>>>>> core). >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Currently: >> >>>>>>>> For example, >> >>>>>>>> some data-centre networks are designed with the bottleneck >> >>>>>>>> in the >> >>>>>>>> hypervisor or host Network Interface Centres (NICs), while >> >>>>>>>> others >> >>>>>>>> bottleneck at the top-of-rack switch (both the output ports >> >>>>>>>> facing >> >>>>>>>> hosts and those facing the core). >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Related note: >> >>>>>>>> As per the mail from Bob Briscoe on 2022-09-12, British English >> >>>>>>>> spelling >> >>>>>>>> has been selected. "(Oxford variant with -ize, -ization but >> -yse)" >> >>>>>>>> --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 8) <!--[rfced] We note that "flow ID" (2 instances) and "flow >> >>>>>>>> identifier" (4 instances) >> >>>>>>>> are both used in this document. For consistency, may we expand >> >>>>>>>> "flow ID" >> >>>>>>>> to "flow identifier", or should it be expanded as something >> >>>>>>>> else, e.g., >> >>>>>>>> "flow identification"? >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Original: >> >>>>>>>> However, per-flow rate control is not >> >>>>>>>> usually deployed as a security mechanism, because an active >> >>>>>>>> attacker >> >>>>>>>> can just shard its traffic over more flow IDs if the rate of >> >>>>>>>> each is >> >>>>>>>> restricted. >> >>>>>>>> ... >> >>>>>>>> For instance, L4S support has been added to FQ-CoDel, which >> >>>>>>>> classifies >> >>>>>>>> by application flow ID in the network. >> >>>>>>>> --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 9) <!--[rfced] May we update "not-registered" to "unregistered" >> >>>>>>>> in the >> >>>>>>>> sentence below? >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Original: >> >>>>>>>> Such local arrangements >> >>>>>>>> would only require simple registered/not-registered packet >> >>>>>>>> classification, rather than the managed, >> >>>>>>>> application-specific traffic >> >>>>>>>> policing against customer-specific traffic contracts that >> >>>>>>>> Diffserv >> >>>>>>>> uses. >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Perhaps: >> >>>>>>>> Such local arrangements >> >>>>>>>> would only require simple registered/unregistered packet >> >>>>>>>> classification, rather than the managed, >> >>>>>>>> application-specific traffic >> >>>>>>>> policing against customer-specific traffic contracts that >> >>>>>>>> Diffserv >> >>>>>>>> uses. >> >>>>>>>> --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 10) <!--[rfced] In the sentence below, does "self-restraint" >> >>>>>>>> limit the rate? >> >>>>>>>> For clarity, may we update this sentence as suggested? >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Original: >> >>>>>>>> Like the Classic service, the L4S service relies on >> >>>>>>>> self-restraint - >> >>>>>>>> limiting rate in response to congestion. >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Perhaps: >> >>>>>>>> Like the Classic service, the L4S service relies on >> >>>>>>>> self-restraint to >> >>>>>>>> limit the rate in response to congestion. >> >>>>>>>> --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 11) <!--[rfced] Regarding the short name for the reference >> >>>>>>>> draft-ietf-tsvwg-ecn-l4s-id, >> >>>>>>>> we note that RFC 8311 cited it as [ENC-L4S], and we have used >> >>>>>>>> the same >> >>>>>>>> citation in this document. However, in text you refer to it as >> >>>>>>>> "the L4S ECN spec". So, would you like us to change the >> >>>>>>>> citation to [L4S-ECN] >> >>>>>>>> accordingly? For example: >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Current: the L4S ECN spec [ECN-L4S] >> >>>>>>>> Perhaps: the L4S ECN spec [L4S-ECN] >> >>>>>>>> --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 12) <!-- [rfced] We see an "October 2021" version of this >> >>>>>>>> document at the URL >> >>>>>>>> provided. Would you like the cite "October 2021" rather than >> >>>>>>>> "July 2021"? >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Original: >> >>>>>>>> [BDPdata] Briscoe, B., "PI2 Parameters", Technical Report >> >>>>>>>> TR-BB- >> >>>>>>>> 2021-001 arXiv:2107.01003 [cs.NI], July 2021, >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> <https://arxiv.org/abs/2107.01003> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> . >> >>>>>>>> --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 13) <!-- [rfced] FYI, we have updated this reference as follows >> >>>>>>>> in keeping with the guidance on citing public code repositories >> >>>>>>>> in the "Web Portion of the Style Guide", specifically >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#ref_repo> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> . >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> For this reference, it seems the intent is to cite the specific >> >>>>>>>> commit rather than the repository as a whole. (Because there >> >>>>>>>> doesn't >> >>>>>>>> seem to be a search by commit, we have left the commit-specific >> >>>>>>>> URL.) >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Original: >> >>>>>>>> [FQ_CoDel_Thresh] >> >>>>>>>> Høiland-Jørgensen, T., "fq_codel: generalise >> >>>>>>>> ce_threshold >> >>>>>>>> marking for subset of traffic", Linux Patch >> >>>>>>>> Commit ID: >> >>>>>>>> dfcb63ce1de6b10b, 20 October 2021, >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> <https://git.kernel.org/pub/scm/linux/kernel/git/netdev/ >> >>>>>>>> net-next.git/commit/?id=dfcb63ce1de6b10b> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> . >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Updated: >> >>>>>>>> [FQ_CoDel_Thresh] >> >>>>>>>> "fq_codel: generalise ce_threshold marking for >> >>>>>>>> subset of >> >>>>>>>> traffic", commit >> >>>>>>>> dfcb63ce1de6b10ba98dee928f9463f37e5a5512, >> >>>>>>>> October 2020, >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> <https://git.kernel.org/pub/scm/linux/kernel/git/netdev/ >> >>>>>>>> net-next.git/commit/?id=dfcb63ce1de6b10b> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> . >> >>>>>>>> --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 14) <!-- [rfced] This reference includes text that is not in >> >>>>>>>> English. Would it be >> >>>>>>>> helpful to readers to include a translation in parentheses? If >> >>>>>>>> so, please >> >>>>>>>> provide that. >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Current: >> >>>>>>>> [Raaen14] Raaen, K. and T-M. Grønli, "Latency Thresholds for >> >>>>>>>> Usability in Games: A Survey", Norsk >> >>>>>>>> IKT-konferanse for >> >>>>>>>> forskning og utdanning, 2014, >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> <http://ojs.bibsys.no/index.php/NIK/article/view/9/6> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> . >> >>>>>>>> --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 15) <!-- [rfced] Formatting >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> a) Regarding the format of Figure 3 ("Example L4S Deployment >> >>>>>>>> Sequence"), it >> >>>>>>>> remains in an artwork element as in the submitted XML file. It >> >>>>>>>> could be >> >>>>>>>> formatted as a table element, in which case, the three lines in >> >>>>>>>> all caps would >> >>>>>>>> each be in a separate row. Please let us know if you'd like us >> >>>>>>>> to change >> >>>>>>>> Figure 3 to a table. >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> [BB] I gave all my responses within the XML, except I couldn't >> >>>>>>> draw the tables below, because double hyphens are not allowed >> >>>>>>> within XML comments. >> >>>>>>> They should be viewed with a fixed-width font. >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> I don't think it would be as comprehensible for the lines in all >> >>>>>>> caps to be shown in separate rows. I tried some variants >> >>>>>>> (below), but the current one is still the least worst. >> >>>>>>> So please leave it as-is, unless you can produce an example that >> >>>>>>> looks better than all of the variants below. >> >>>>>>> Reasoning: >> >>>>>>> * The LESS PREFERRED#1 variant is perhaps even more clunky than >> >>>>>>> the CURRENT version, and I suspect it wouldn't be easy to >> >>>>>>> produce in XML anyway. >> >>>>>>> * The LESS PREFERRED#2 variant tends to confuse the eye into >> >>>>>>> separating the capitalized line from the numbered row it belongs >> >>>>>>> to. >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> STATUS: PENDING RFC Editor decision. >> >>>>>>> CURRENT: >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> | | Servers or proxies | Access link | �� >> >>>>>>> Clients | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> |0| DCTCP (existing) | | DCTCP >> >>>>>>> (existing) | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> |1| |Add L4S AQM >> >>>>>>> downstream| | >> >>>>>>> | | WORKS DOWNSTREAM FOR CONTROLLED >> >>>>>>> DEPLOYMENTS/TRIALS | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> |2| Upgrade DCTCP to | |Replace DCTCP feedb'k| >> >>>>>>> | | TCP Prague | | with AccECN | >> >>>>>>> | | FULLY WORKS >> >>>>>>> DOWNSTREAM | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> | | | | Upgrade >> >>>>>>> DCTCP to | >> >>>>>>> |3| | Add L4S AQM upstream | TCP >> >>>>>>> Prague | >> >>>>>>> | | | | | >> >>>>>>> | | FULLY WORKS UPSTREAM AND >> >>>>>>> DOWNSTREAM | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> LESS PREFERRED#1: >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> | | Servers or proxies | Access link | >> >>>>>>> Clients | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> |0| DCTCP (existing) | | DCTCP >> >>>>>>> (existing) | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> |1| |Add L4S AQM >> >>>>>>> downstream| | >> >>>>>>> | | | >> >>>>>>> | | WORKS DOWNSTREAM FOR CONTROLLED >> >>>>>>> DEPLOYMENTS/TRIALS | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> |2| Upgrade DCTCP to | |Replace DCTCP feedb'k| >> >>>>>>> | | TCP Prague | | with AccECN | >> >>>>>>> | | | >> >>>>>>> | | FULLY WORKS >> >>>>>>> DOWNSTREAM | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> | | | | Upgrade >> >>>>>>> DCTCP to | >> >>>>>>> |3| | Add L4S AQM upstream | TCP >> >>>>>>> Prague | >> >>>>>>> | | | >> >>>>>>> | | FULLY WORKS UPSTREAM AND >> >>>>>>> DOWNSTREAM | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> LESS PREFERRED#2: >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> | | Servers or proxies | Access link | >> >>>>>>> Clients | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> |0| DCTCP (existing) | | DCTCP >> >>>>>>> (existing) | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> |1| |Add L4S AQM >> >>>>>>> downstream| | >> >>>>>>> | >> >>>>>>> >> +--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> | | WORKS DOWNSTREAM FOR CONTROLLED >> >>>>>>> DEPLOYMENTS/TRIALS | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> |2| Upgrade DCTCP to | |Replace DCTCP feedb'k| >> >>>>>>> | | TCP Prague | | with AccECN | >> >>>>>>> | >> >>>>>>> >> +--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> | | FULLY WORKS >> >>>>>>> DOWNSTREAM | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> | | | | Upgrade >> >>>>>>> DCTCP to | >> >>>>>>> |3| | Add L4S AQM upstream | TCP >> >>>>>>> Prague | >> >>>>>>> | >> >>>>>>> >> +--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> | | FULLY WORKS UPSTREAM AND >> >>>>>>> DOWNSTREAM | >> >>>>>>> >> +-+--------------------+----------------------+---------------------+ >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> b) Please review the use of <em> in this document and let us >> >>>>>>>> know if any >> >>>>>>>> updates are needed. >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> c) Please review whether any of the notes in this document >> >>>>>>>> should be in the >> >>>>>>>> <aside> element. It is defined as "a container for content that >> is >> >>>>>>>> semantically less important or tangential to the content that >> >>>>>>>> surrounds it" >> >>>>>>>> ( >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> https://authors.ietf.org/en/rfcxml-vocabulary#aside >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> ). --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> 16) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion >> >>>>>>>> of the online >> >>>>>>>> Style Guide >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language >> > >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> and let us know if any changes are needed. Note that our >> >>>>>>>> script did not flag >> >>>>>>>> any words in particular, but this should still be reviewed as a >> >>>>>>>> best practice. >> >>>>>>>> --> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> Thank you. >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> RFC Editor/ap >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>>> On Oct 20, 2022, at 1:58 PM, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org >> >>>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>>> wrote: >> >>>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>>> NOTE: A new number has been assigned for this RFC-to-be. >> >>>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>>> (Previous mails used 9324; the number is now 9330.) >> >>>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>>> *****IMPORTANT***** >> >>>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>>> Updated 2022/10/20 >> >>>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>>> RFC Author(s): >> >>>>>>>>> -------------- >> >>>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>>> Instructions for Completing AUTH48 >> >>>>>>>>> >> >>>>>>>>> Your document has now entered AUTH48. 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- [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft-ietf-tsvwg… rfc-editor
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Alanna Paloma
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Alanna Paloma
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Bob Briscoe
- [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <… Alice Russo
- Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 93… Gorry Fairhurst
- Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 93… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 93… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 93… Gorry Fairhurst
- Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 93… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 93… Martin Duke
- Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 93… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 93… Martin Duke
- Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 93… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <… Alice Russo
- Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 93… Gorry Fairhurst
- Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 93… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <… Alice Russo
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <… Alanna Paloma
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <… Martin Duke
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Alanna Paloma
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Greg White
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… marcelo bagnulo braun
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Alanna Paloma
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Koen De Schepper (Nokia)
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Alanna Paloma
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Alanna Paloma
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Alanna Paloma
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Alanna Paloma
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Bob Briscoe
- [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <… Alanna Paloma
- Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 93… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] Re: [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 93… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <… Alanna Paloma
- Re: [auth48] [AD] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <… Martin Duke
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Alanna Paloma
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Bob Briscoe
- Re: [auth48] [C350] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9330 <draft… Karen Moore