Re: [auth48] AUTH48: RFC-to-be 9506 <draft-ietf-ippm-explicit-flow-measurements-07> for your review
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Authors, While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the XML file. 1) <!-- [rfced] Should the short title, which is displayed in the PDF, be updated to better match the full title? Current: Delay and Loss Bits Perhaps: Host-to-Network Flow Measurements --> 2) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that appear in the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. --> 3) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.2.5. We're having difficulty parsing the following lead-in phrase: Original: A unidirectional observer or in case of asymmetric routing, upon detecting a delay sample: Perhaps (Making the lead-in phrase conditional): If the observer is unidirectional or in the case of asymmetric routing, then upon detecting a delay sample: --> 4) <!-- [rfced] Section 3. Is there a word missing in the following sentence? Should it say "(or each sub-flow..."? Original: Each endpoint maintains appropriate counters independently and separately for each separately identifiable flow (each sub-flow for multipath connections). --> 5) <!-- [rfced] Section 3.1. Do the following updates improve the clarity of the round-trip reflection exchange? Original: The overall exchange comprises: * the client selects and consequently sets the T bit to 1 in order to identify a first train of packets; * the server, upon receiving each packet included in the first train, reflects to the client a respective second train of packets of the same size as the first train received, by setting the T bit to 1; * the client, upon receiving each packet included in the second train, reflects to the server a respective third train of packets of the same size as the second train received, by setting the T bit to 1; * the server, upon receiving each packet included in the third train, finally reflects to the client a respective fourth train of packets of the same size as the third train received, by setting the T bit to 1. Perhaps (adding text to the lead-in sentence and changing the order of the sub-steps in list items 2-4): The overall exchange comprises the following steps: * the client selects and consequently sets the T bit to 1 in order to identify a first train of packets; * upon receiving each packet included in the first train, the server sets the T bit to 1 and reflects to the client a respective second train of packets of the same size as the first train received; * upon receiving each packet included in the second train, the client sets the T bit to 1 and reflects to the server a respective third train of packets of the same size as the second train received; * upon receiving each packet included in the third train, the server sets the T bit to 1 and finally reflects to the client a respective fourth train of packets of the same size as the third train received. --> 6) <!-- [rfced] Section 3.1.2. In the following sentence, what correlations is the observer trying to maintain? Original: The connection between T Bit and Spin bit helps the correlations on the observer. Possibly: The connection between the T bit and Spin bit helps the observer correlate packet trains. --> 7) <!-- [rfced] Section 3.1.2. In the following sentence, are "just" 1/4 of the packets monitored or are "approximately" 1/4 of the packets monitored? Also the numbers in this section are formatted with <tt> (e.g., <tt>~1/4</tt>). Should they be? Original: Choosing a generation phase of 1-RTT, we would produce measurements every 4-RTT, monitoring just ~1/4 of packets in the slower direction. --> 8) <!-- [rfced] Section 3.2. In the following sentence, it is not clear what is allowed to mark the blocks. Please let us know how we can clarify the statement. Original: This method is based on the Alternate-Marking method [AltMark] and the Q bit represents the "packet color" that allows to mark consecutive blocks of packets with different colors. --> 9) <!-- [rfced] Section 3.2. Does the following update improve the readability of the sentence? Original: The method based on fixed timer can measure packet loss on a network segment by cooperating and synchronized observers on both ends of the segment comparing packets counters for the same packet blocks. Perhaps (saying at the beginning who can use the fixed-timer method): Cooperating and synchronized observers on either end of a network segment can use the fixed-timer method to measure packet loss on the segment by comparing packet counters for the same packet blocks. --> 10) <!-- [rfced] Section 3.3. We could not find an Echo Loss bit in RFC 7713 [ConEx], nor could we find a field that reported an approximate number of lost bytes. Please let us know how we may update this sentence. Original: This loss signaling is similar to loss signaling in [ConEx], except the Loss Event bit is reporting the exact number of lost packets, whereas Echo Loss bit in [ConEx] is reporting an approximate number of lost bytes. --> 11) <!-- [rfced] Section 3.3.2.1. In the sentence below, should the observer measure the upstream loss rate for one RTT before starting to measure the end-to-end loss? Please help us clarify this sentence: Original: Whenever the observer needs to perform a computation that uses both upstream and end-to-end loss rate measurements, it should use upstream loss rate leading the end-to-end loss rate by approximately 1 RTT. --> 12) <!-- [rfced] Section 4. In Table 2, are the arrows (e.g., "-> see Q") necessary? In the bottom-right cell, may we expand "pk" to "pkts"? Current: + - - - - - -+- - +- - - - - - +- - - - - - -+ - -+ - - - - -+- - - + | QL: sQuare | 2 | Upstream | x2 | # |-> see Q |see Q | | + Loss Ev. | +- - - - - - +- - - - - - -+ - -+ - - - - -+- - - + | Bits | | Downstream | x2 | # |-> see |see L | | | | | | |Q|L | | | | +- - - - - - +- - - - - - -+ - -+ - - - - -+- - - + | | | E2E | x2 | # |-> see L |see L | + - - - - - -+- - +- - - - - - +- - - - - - -+ - -+ - - - - -+- - - + | QR: sQuare | 2 | Upstream | x2 | * |Rate over |see Q | | + Ref. Sq. | +- - - - - - +- - - - - - -+ - -+N*ppa + - - -+ | Bits | | 3/4 RT | x2 | * |pkts (see |N*ppa | | | +- - - - - - +- - - - - - -+ - -+Q bit for |pk | | | | !E2E | E2E, | * |N) |(see Q| | | | | Downstream, | | |bit | | | | | Half RT | | |for N)| + - - - - - -+- - +- - - - - - +- - - - - - -+ - -+ - - - - -+- - - + --> 13) <!-- [rfced] Section 7. Does the following update improve the readability of the sentence? Original: The measurements described in this document do not imply new packets injected into the network causing potential harm to the network itself and to data traffic. Perhaps (clarifying that packets are not implied to cause harm): The measurements described in this document do not imply that new packets injected into the network can cause potential harm to the network itself and to data traffic. --> 14) <!-- [rfced] Terminology a) We have expanded the following abbreviations. Please review each expansion in the document carefully to ensure correctness. CE - Congestion Experienced (from RFC 9000) CPE - Customer Premises Equipment E2E - end to end PE - Provider Edge RTO - retransmission timeout SCTP - Stream Control Transmission Protocol c) Please help us make these terms consistent. The number of instances are given in parentheses: 1-RTT (1) vs 1 RTT (4) 2-RTT (1) vs 2 RTT (2) 4-RTT (1) vs 4 RTT (0) 6-RTT (1) vs 6 RTT (2) Generation Phase (4, (2 in titles)) vs Generation phase (2) vs generation phase (4) Pause Phase (2) vs Pause phase (1) vs pause phase (1) Reflection Phase (4, (2 in titles)) vs Reflection phase (2) vs reflection phase (1) Loss Event bit (7) vs Loss event bit (1, definition) Reflection square signal bit (1, definition) vs Reflection square bit (3) sQuare bit (4) vs sQuare signal bit (1, definition) Reflection Block (1, definition) vs reflection block (2) vs R Block (11) spin-bit period (4) vs Spin bit period (2) vs spin period (5, definition) --> 15) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online Style Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language> and let us know if any changes are needed. In addition, please consider whether "tradition" should be updated for clarity. While the NIST website <https://www.nist.gov/nist-research-library/ nist-technical-series-publications-author-instructions#table1> indicates that this term is potentially biased, it is also ambiguous. "Tradition" is a subjective term, as it is not the same for everyone. --> Thank you. RFC Editor/jm/ap On Oct 26, 2023, at 2:06 PM, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org wrote: *****IMPORTANT***** Updated 2023/10/26 RFC Author(s): -------------- Instructions for Completing AUTH48 Your document has now entered AUTH48. Once it has been reviewed and approved by you and all coauthors, it will be published as an RFC. If an author is no longer available, there are several remedies available as listed in the FAQ (https://www.rfc-editor.org/faq/). You and you coauthors are responsible for engaging other parties (e.g., Contributors or Working Group) as necessary before providing your approval. 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