[auth48] Re: [AD] Final Review: RFC-to-be 10016 (draft-ietf-netmod-system-config) in XML

[Alanna Paloma <[e-mail]>]

Hi Qiufang,

Thank you for your reply.  We have updated as requested.

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 https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc10016.xml
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Please review the document carefully and contact us with any further updates you may have.  Note that we do not make changes once a document is published as an RFC.

> 5) <!--[rfced] *[AD] We have altered some text in the Security Considerations section to match the boilerplate text at <https://wiki.ietf.org/group/ops/yang-security-guidelines>. Also note that paragraph 4 varies from the template (we attempted to make it match more closely). Please review and let us know if any further updates are needed or if the text is agreeable as is.
> -->        
> [Qiufang] Mahesh will comment this , but why not replace [YANG-GUIDE] with [RFC9907]?

) Note that we are awaiting Mahesh’s word on this. The citation has been updated from "[YANG-GUIDE]" to "[RFC9907]".  

For the Final Review status of this document, please see:
https://queue.rfc-editor.org/final-review/rfc10016/

Thank you,
Alanna Paloma
RFC Production Center

> On Jul 7, 2026, at 11:39 PM, maqiufang (A) <maqiufang1=[e-mail]> wrote:
> 
> Hi,
> 
> Please see below inline with [Qiufang]...
> 
> -----Original Message-----
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> To: maqiufang (A) <[e-mail]>; Qin Wu <[e-mail]>; [e-mail]; [e-mail]
> Cc: [e-mail]; [e-mail]; [e-mail]; [e-mail]; [e-mail]; [e-mail]
> Subject: [AD] Re: Final Review: RFC-to-be 10016 (draft-ietf-netmod-system-config) in XML
> 
> Authors and *AD,
> 
> While reviewing this document during Final Review, please resolve (as necessary) the following questions, which are also in the source file.
> 
> *AD, please review question #5 below.
> 
> 
> 1) <!--[rfced] We note that most of the recently published RFCs containing YANG modules format their titles as "A YANG Data Model for...", for example:
> 
>  RFC 9094 - A YANG Data Model for Wavelength Switched Optical Networks (WSONs)
>  RFC 9093 - A YANG Data Model for Layer 0 Types
>  RFC 9067 - A YANG Data Model for Routing Policy
> 
> Please consider whether the title of this document should be updated.
> 
> Current:
>   System-Defined Configuration
> 
> Perhaps:
>   A YANG Data Model for System-Defined Configuration    
> -->
> [Qiufang] The Current is better. This draft defines more than a YANG data model.
> 
> 2) <!--[rfced] Per guidance from Section 2 of RFC 8340, we moved the lines in the YANG tree diagram (in Section 7.1) over two spaces to the left. Please review and let us know of any objections.
> -->
> [Qiufang] Okay. No objections.
> 
> 
> 3) <!--[rfced] Because XML examples are present in this document, we added a citation to W3C in Section 7.3 and a corresponding entry under the Informative References section.  Please let us know if this is agreeable or if you prefer otherwise.
> 
> Original:
>   The following example shows how the configuration in <system> could
>   be retrieved in a NETCONF <get-data> RPC operation.  The example uses
>   the "example-application" fictional data model defined in
>   Appendix A.1.
> 
> Current: 
>   The following example shows how the configuration in <system> could
>   be retrieved in a NETCONF <get-data> RPC operation.  The example
>   uses XML [W3C.XML1.0] and the "example-application" fictional data
>   model defined in Appendix A.1.
> -->
> 
> [Qiufang] Perhaps:
> OLD:
>   The following example shows how the configuration in <system> could
>   be retrieved in a NETCONF <get-data> RPC operation.  The example
>   uses XML [W3C.XML1.0] and the "example-application" fictional data
>   model defined in Appendix A.1.
> NEW:
>   The following example shows how the configuration in <system> could
>   be retrieved in a NETCONF <get-data> RPC operation.  The example
>   uses the "example-application" fictional data
>   model defined in Appendix A.1 and the Extensible Markup Language (XML) [W3C.XML1.0] encoding.
> 
> 
> 4) <!--[rfced] FYI - In Section 7.3, note that we moved the example over three spaces to the left because "xmlns:sysds="urn:ietf:params:xml:ns:yang:ietf-system-datastore">"
> was 3 characters over the limit.
> -->
> [Qiufang] Okay.
> 
> 
> 5) <!--[rfced] *[AD] We have altered some text in the Security Considerations section to match the boilerplate text at <https://wiki.ietf.org/group/ops/yang-security-guidelines>. Also note that paragraph 4 varies from the template (we attempted to make it match more closely). Please review and let us know if any further updates are needed or if the text is agreeable as is.
> -->        
> [Qiufang] Mahesh will comment this , but why not replace [YANG-GUIDE] with [RFC9907]?
> 
> 
> 6) <!--[rfced] Note that the YANG module examples have been updated per the formatting option of pyang.  Please let us know any concerns.
> 
> a) example-application has been updated as follows:
> 
>  prefix "ex-app" -> prefix ex-app
>  prefix "inet"   -> prefix inet
> 
> b) example-acl has been updated as follows:
> 
>  prefix "ex-acl" -> prefix ex-acl
>  prefix "ex-app" -> prefix ex-app
>  prefix "inet"   -> prefix inet
> 
> c) example-interface has been updated as follows:
> 
>  prefix "ex-if" -> prefix ex-if
>  prefix "inet"  -> prefix inet
>  key name       -> key "name"
> 
> d) example-interface-management has been updated as follows:
> 
>  prefix "ex-ifm" -> prefix ex-ifm
>  prefix "inet"   -> prefix inet
> -->
> 
> [Qiufang] All above are good.
> 
> 7) <!--[rfced] We note that the following system configuration terms are hyphenated. Are these specific terms that should always appear hyphenated? We are confirming because adverbs ending in "ly" are not typically hyphenated in the RFC Series, and we could not find the hyphenated forms of these terms in past RFCs.
> 
> If the hyphens are not essential, we would remove them from "immediately-present" and "conditionally-present", and we would hyphenate "always present" only when in attributive position (i.e., when followed by a noun). Please let us know your preference.
> 
> always-present
> conditionally-present
> immediately-present
> -->
> [Qiufang] Okay to remove the hyphen.
> 
> 
> 8) <!-- [rfced] FYI - We have added expansions for the following abbreviations per Section 3.6 of RFC 7322 ("RFC Style Guide"). Please review each expansion in the document carefully to ensure correctness.
> 
> Access Control List (ACL)
> Network Configuration Protocol (NETCONF)
> -->
> [Qiufang] Looks good to me.
> 
> 
> 9) <!-- [rfced] Please review the "Inclusive Language" portion of the online Style Guide <https://www.rfc-editor.org/styleguide/part2/#inclusive_language>
> and let us know if any changes are needed.  Updates of this nature typically result in more precise language, which is helpful for readers. 
> 
> Note that our script did not flag any words in particular, but this should still be reviewed as a best practice.
> -->
> [Qiufang] I do not think any changes are needed. Thanks.
> 
> I do have one additional comment, in the Acknowledgements section, could you please update the following names:
> OLD: Balazs Lengyel
> NEW: Balázs Lengyel
> 
> OLD: Martin Bjorklund
> NEW: Martin Björklund
> 
> OLD: Juergen Schoenwaelder
> NEW: Jürgen Schönwälder
> 
> Best Regards,
> Qiufang
> 
> Thank you.
> 
> Alanna Paloma and Karen Moore
> RFC Production Center
> 
> 
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> --------------------------------------
> RFC 10016 (draft-ietf-netmod-system-config)
> 
> Title            : System-defined Configuration
> Author(s)        : Q. Ma, Ed.,
>                  Q. Wu,
>                  C. Feng
> WG Chair(s)      : Kent Watsen, Lou Berger
> Area Director(s) : Mohamed Boucadair, Mahesh Jethanandani