[bess] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-fast-failover-13: (with COMMENT)

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draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-fast-failover-13: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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— Section 1 —

   The procedures described in this document are optional to enable an
   operator to provide protection for multicast services in BGP/MPLS IP
   VPNs.  An operator would enable these mechanisms using a method
   discussed in Section 3 in combination with the redundancy provided by

It’s a very small point, but I think it’s just a little harder to follow than
necessary because of two uses of “enable” with different senses — it’s easy to
read the first in the same sense as the second, “optional to enable” (rather
than “to enable an operator to...”).  I suggest changing the first to “allow”,
and maybe also change it slightly, so: “are optional, and allow an operator
to...”.

— Section 2.2 —
It’s usually not a good idea to have different definitions for things such as
“upstream” and “Upstream”, for one reason because they can’t be distinguished
if they begin a sentence (where they’ll both appear as “Upstream”), and for
another because it’s easy to inadvertently write the wrong one and not catch
it.  I checked, and I don’t see any case of the first in this document (where
“Upstream” appears at the beginning of the second bullet in Section 5 it seems
to be clear because of “downstream” in the other bullets), but you need to be
careful not to introduce that ambiguity during the editing process.  It would
be good for the AD to include an RFC Editor note to that effect, so they are
alerted to this situation and to avoid beginning any sentences with “Upstream”.
 And the authors should be sure to carefully check every instance of the word
during AUTH48 (it would be good for the RFC Editor to include a reminder of
that in the AUTH48 message).