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From: "Jeffrey (Zhaohui) Zhang" <zzhang@juniper.net>
To: Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Hi Russ,

Thanks for your review and comments.
Please see zzh> below.


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Subject: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-evpn-aggregation-label-10

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Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review result: Almost Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-evpn-aggregation-label-10
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2023-06-30
IETF LC End Date: 2023-07-12
IESG Telechat date: unknown


Summary: Almost Ready


Major Concerns: None.


Minor Concerns:

Section 2.2: Please provide more discussion of "central authority".  I do not think that a Internet-wide authority is required to meet this requirement.  I think that the authority needs to be recognized throughout a provider network.

Zzh> Correct. I changed the first to "central entity in the provider network", and the rest to "central entity".
Zzh> I fixed the following nits as well - will post the revision after the quiescence period is over.

Zzh> Jeffrey

Nits:

Section 1: please avoid splitting "I/S-PMSI" across multiple lines.

Section 2: s/ingress PE's default label space/default label space/

Section 2: s/packet's ingress PE/ingress PE of the packet/

Section 2.2.2.1: s/Route-2 respectively/Route-2, respectively/

Section 3.2: s/PTA's Label field/label field of the PTA/

Section 3.2: s/source PE's label space/label space of the source PE/

Section 4: s/third party's label space/label space of a third party/ (2 places)

Section 4: please spell out "LFIBs"; this term is not in the definitions.

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