[bess] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-evpn-aggregation-label-12: (with COMMENT)

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# GEN AD review of draft-ietf-bess-mvpn-evpn-aggregation-label-12

CC @larseggert

Thanks to Russ Housley for the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review
(https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/3fAtK3w0wRrSeNCGgzBnr86jTRU).

## Nits

All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

### Grammar/style

#### Section 1, paragraph 14
```
onal label spaces is to be used to lookup the label, hence those label space
                                   ^^^^^^
```
The word "lookup" is a noun. The verb is spelled with a white space.

#### Section 1, paragraph 16
```
referred to as upstream-assigned. Otherwise it is downstream-assigned. An ups
                                  ^^^^^^^^^
```
A comma may be missing after the conjunctive/linking adverb "Otherwise".

#### Section 2.1, paragraph 5
```
VPN 1, and so forth. Now only 1000 label instead of 1,000,000 labels are nee
                                   ^^^^^
```
Possible agreement error. The noun "label" seems to be countable.

#### Section 2.2.1, paragraph 2
```
hen tunnel segmentation is applied to a S-PMSI, certain nodes are "segmentati
                                      ^
```
Use "an" instead of "a" if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g.
"an article", "an hour".

#### Section 2.2.2.1, paragraph 1
```
 tunnel T2 and Flow-2 by tunnel T3. Then when the segmentation point receives
                                    ^^^^
```
Consider adding a comma here.

#### Section 2.2.2.1, paragraph 3
```
 labels for segmented S-PMSI independently from its assigned label block tha
                             ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
```
The usual collocation for "independently" is "of", not "from". Did you mean
"independently of"?

#### Section 2.2.2.2, paragraph 1
```
-PMSIs for the same VPN/BD to share the a VPN/BD-identifying label that leads
                                    ^^^^^
```
Two determiners in a row. Choose either "the" or "a".

#### Section 3.2, paragraph 5
```
nel encapsulation of data packets arriving on the tunnel. * They MUST all hav
                                  ^^^^^^^^^^^
```
The usual preposition after "arriving" is "at", not "on". Did you mean
"arriving at"?

## Notes

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