[C310] Fwd: [AD] Re: AUTH48 [JM]: RFC 9030 <draft-ietf-6tisch-architecture-30.txt> NOW AVAILABLE
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Forwarding to the list. (2 of 2) > Begin forwarded message: > > From: rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org > Subject: [AD] Re: AUTH48 [JM]: RFC 9030 <draft-ietf-6tisch-architecture-30.txt> NOW AVAILABLE > Date: May 5, 2021 at 5:08:24 PM PDT > To: pthubert@cisco.com > Cc: shwetha.bhandari@gmail.com, 6tisch-ads@ietf.org, ek.ietf@gmail.com, 6tisch-chairs@ietf.org, rfc-editor@rfc-editor.org > > Pascal, Erik (as AD), > > *Erik, please reply to #1 below. > > While reviewing this document during AUTH48, please resolve > the following questions, which are also in the XML file. > > 1) <!-- [rfced] AD: Please review and let us know if you approve the > changes made after -28 of this draft was approved. They are shown > in this diff file (comparing -28 and -30): > https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url1=draft-ietf-6tisch-architecture-28&url2=draft-ietf-6tisch-architecture-30 > > FYI, in the questions that follow, "Original" refers to version 30. > Also, version 30 was used for the original in the diff file > for reviewing the RFC Editor's updates to the text. > --> > > > 2) <!-- [rfced] FYI, the authors' comments in the XML file have been > marked with [auth]. Please let us know if any updates are needed > based on those comments; if not, they will be removed. > --> > > > 3) <!-- [rfced] Please insert any keywords (beyond those that > appear in the title) for use on https://www.rfc-editor.org/search. > --> > > > 4) <!--[rfced] We suggest all instances of "Layer-2" and "Layer-3" > be updated to "Layer 2" and "Layer 3" (no hyphen), in keeping with > common usage in RFCs including RFCs 8928 and 8929. Please let us > know if this change is acceptable. > --> > > > 5) <!-- [rfced] The format of cell identification is inconsistent: > [slotOffset, channelOffset] - 1 instance > (slotOffset/channelOffset) - 1 instance > slotOffset/channelOffset - 5 instances > > How would you like it formatted? > --> > > > 6) <!-- [rfced] Section 2.1: May we remove "then" before"the IPv6 source > address" in this paragraph? > > Original: > TrackID: A TrackID is either globally unique, or locally unique to > the Track owner, in which case the identification of the owner > must be provided together with the TrackID to provide a full > reference to the Track. typically, the Track owner is the ingress > of the Track then the IPv6 source address of packets along the > Track can be used as identification of the owner and a local > InstanceID [RFC6550] in the namespace of that owner can be used as > TrackID. If the Track is reversible, then the owner is found in > the IPv6 destination address of a packet coming back along the > Track. [...] > > Perhaps (drop "then"): > TrackID: A TrackID is either globally unique or locally unique to > the Track owner, in which case the identification of the owner > must be provided together with the TrackID to provide a full > reference to the Track. Typically, the Track owner is the ingress > of the Track, the IPv6 source address of packets along the > Track can be used as identification of the owner, and a local > InstanceID [RFC6550] in the namespace of that owner can be used as > TrackID. If the Track is reversible, then the owner is found in > the IPv6 destination address of a packet coming back along the > Track. [...] > --> > > > 7) <!-- [rfced] We are having difficulty parsing the following > sentence in Section 3.2 ("...in turn perform proxy classical > ND operations..."): > > Current: > In the latter case, it leverages the > extended registration process defined in [RFC8505] to proxy the > 6LoWPAN ND registration to the 6BBR on behalf of the LLN nodes, > so that the 6BBR may in turn perform proxy classical ND > operations over the backbone. > > Perhaps: > In the latter case, it leverages the > extended registration process defined in [RFC8505] to proxy the > 6LoWPAN ND registration to the 6BBR on behalf of the LLN nodes, > so that the 6BBR may in turn perform classical ND operations > over the backbone as a proxy. > > Or perhaps: > In the latter case, it leverages the > extended registration process defined in [RFC8505] to proxy the > 6LoWPAN ND registration to the 6BBR on behalf of the LLN nodes, > so that the 6BBR may in turn proxy classical ND operations over > the backbone. > --> > > > 8) <!-- [rfced] We have made the following change in Section 3.3 > to improve readability (by rephrasing "lots of lesser importance > measurements" and the subsequent list). Please let us know if > further changes are necessary. > > Original: > Examples of such use cases in industrial environments include > plant setup and decommissioning, as well as monitoring of lots > of lesser importance measurements such as corrosion and events > and mobile workers accessing local devices. > > Current: > Examples of such use cases in industrial environments include > plant setup and decommissioning, as well as monitoring a > multiplicity of minor notifications such as corrosion > measurements, events, and access of local devices by mobile > workers. > --> > > > 9) <!-- [rfced] We have made the following changes in Section 3.4 > to improve readability. Please let us know if other changes > are necessary. > > Original: > A scheduling operation attributes cells in a Time-Division- > Multiplexing (TDM) / Frequency-Division Multiplexing (FDM) matrix > called the Channel distribution/usage (CDU) to either individual > transmissions or as multi-access shared resources. > > Current: > A scheduling operation allocates cells in a TDM/FDM matrix > called a CDU either to individual transmissions or as > multi-access shared resources. > --> > > > 10) <!-- [rfced] We have made the following changes in Section 3.4 > to improve readability. Please let us know if other changes > are necessary. > > Original: > From the standpoint of a 6TiSCH node (at the MAC layer), > its schedule is the collection of the timeslots at which > it must wake up for transmission, and the channels to which > it should either send or listen at those times. > > Current: > At the MAC layer, the schedule of a 6TiSCH node is the > collection of the timeslots at which it must wake up for > transmission and of the channels to which it should either > send or listen at those times. > --> > > > 11) <!-- [rfced] In the following, was "convergecast routing" > intended as "convergent routing"? > > Original: > Static Scheduling with minimal configuration one is the > only one that is expected in all implementations, since it > provides a simple and solid basis for convergecast routing > and time distribution. > --> > > > 12) <!-- [rfced] May "combination" be used here instead of "conjunction"? > The word choice seems odd, as the latter means things occurring at the > same point in time or space. > > Current: > The reference stack presented in this document was implemented and > interop-tested by a conjunction of open source, IETF, and ETSI efforts. > > Perhaps: > The reference stack presented in this document was implemented and > interop-tested by a combination of open source, IETF, and ETSI efforts. > --> > > > 13) <!-- [rfced] Given that RPL specifies multiple sequence numbers, > which sequence number is meant below? > > Current: > The leaf indicates that it requires reachability services for > the Registered Address from a Routing Registrar by setting an 'R' flag > in the Extended Address Registration Option [RFC8505], and it > provides a TID that maps to a sequence number in Section 7 of RPL > [RFC6550]. > --> > > > 14) <!-- [rfced] Please clarify "device Unique ID (from 6LoWPAN ND)". > > Current (Section 4.2.2): > As detailed in > Section 4.1, the combined 6LoWPAN ND 6LBR and Root of the RPL network > learn information such as the device Unique ID (from 6LoWPAN ND) and > the updated Sequence Number (from RPL), and perform 6LoWPAN ND proxy > registration to the 6BBR on behalf of the LLN nodes. > > Section 4.1.2 talks about associating the unique ID from the > EDAR/EDAC exchange. There is no explicit "Unique ID" in 6LoWPAN ND. > Perhaps this was intended to be about the ROVR? It "[e]nables the > correlation between multiple attempts to register the same IPv6 > Address" [RFC8505], which takes the place of an EUI-64 (IEEE > extended 64-bit address) in this updated EDA message format. > > Current (Section 4.1.2): > When 6LoWPAN ND is coupled with RPL, the 6LBR and RPL Root > functionalities are co-located in order that the address of the 6LBR > is indicated by RPL DODAG Information Object (DIO) messages and to > associate the unique ID from the Extended Duplicate Address Request/ > Confirmation (EDAR/EDAC) exchange [RFC8505] with the state that is > maintained by RPL. > --> > > > 15) <!-- [rfced] "rendez-vous slot" is not mentioned in [RFC9033] > nor [RFC8180]. How should this be updated? Perhaps "timeslot"? > > Original: > ... MSF uses the > rendez-vous slot from [RFC8180] for network discovery, neighbor > discovery, and any other broadcast. > --> > > > 16) <!-- [rfced] Because "iterates" includes the meaning of repeatedly, > we have updated this sentence as follows; please review. > > Current: > A CDU matrix iterates over and over with a well-known channel rotation > called the hopping sequence. > > Perhaps: > A CDU matrix iterates over a well-known channel rotation called the > hopping sequence. > --> > > > 17) <!-- [rfced] We are having difficulty parsing the following > sentence from Section 4.3.6, specifically "and preexists to". > > Current: > This is as opposed to Static Scheduling, which refers to the > preprogrammed mechanism that is specified in [RFC8180] and > preexists to the distribution of the chunk formatting. > > Perhaps: > This is as opposed to Static Scheduling, which refers to the > preprogrammed mechanism specified in [RFC8180] and which > existed before the distribution of chunk formatting. > --> > > > 18) <!-- [rfced] When the text says "6top layer", should it say > "6top sublayer" instead? > > For example: > The aggregation of the cells between a node and a peer forms a > bundle that the 6top layer uses to implement the abstraction of > a link for IP. > --> > > > 19) <!-- [rfced] It is not clear what is meant by the slash between > [RFC4080] and [RFC5974] in Section 4.4.4. Does it mean "and/or"? > > Original: > This hop-by-hop reservation mechanism is expected to be similar in > essence to [RFC3209] and/or [RFC4080]/[RFC5974]. > --> > > > 20) <!-- [rfced] We are having difficulty parsing the following > sentence in Section 4.5.2: > > Current: > For a given iteration of the device schedule, the effective > channel of the cell is obtained by following in a loop a > well-known hopping sequence that started at Epoch time at the > channelOffset of the cell, which results in a rotation of the > frequency that is used for transmission. > > Perhaps: > For a given iteration of the device schedule, the effective > channel of the cell is obtained by looping through a well-known > hopping sequence beginning at Epoch time and starting at the > cell's channelOffset, which results in a rotation of the frequency > that is used for transmission. > --> > > > 21) <!-- [rfced] FYI, we have updated the reference to draft-rahul-roll-mop-ext > with draft-ietf-draft-ietf-roll-capabilities, which replaced it. > Please let us know if other changes are necessary. > --> > > > 22) <!-- [rfced] FYI, we have updated the reference to draft-selander-ace-cose-ecdhe > with draft-ietf-lake-edhoc, which replaced it. > Please let us know if other changes are necessary. > --> > > > 23) <!-- [rfced] How should this reference be updated? > https://www.hartcomm.org currently does not exist, but it recently > was redirecting to https://fieldcommgroup.org/. (The redirect page said > "HART Communication Foundation is now FieldComm Group".) > > Is there a specific page from https://fieldcommgroup.org/ to reference, > or perhaps change to IEC 62591 as shown below? > > Original: > [WirelessHART] > www.hartcomm.org, "Industrial Communication Networks - > Wireless Communication Network and Communication Profiles > - WirelessHART - IEC 62591", 2010. > > Perhaps (as in RFC 8578): > [WirelessHART] > International Electrotechnical Commission, "Industrial > networks - Wireless communication network and > communication profiles - WirelessHART(TM)", > IEC 62591:2016, March 2016. > --> > > > 24) <!-- [rfced] Similar question as above. We have updated this > reference as follows; please review. > > Original: > [HART] www.hartcomm.org, "Highway Addressable remote Transducer, > a group of specifications for industrial process and > control devices administered by the HART Foundation". > > Current: > [HART] FieldComm Group, "HART", > <https://fieldcommgroup.org/technologies/hart>. > --> > > > 25) <!-- [rfced] FYI, for [ISA100.11a] the provided URL > (http://www.isa.org/Community/SP100WirelessSystemsforAutomation) does not work. > We have updated this to the following URL, which is a link to the standard: > https://www.isa.org/products/ansi-isa-100-11a-2011-wireless-systems-for-industr > Please let us know any further updates. > (The IEC number brings up the following: https://webstore.iec.ch/publication/65581) > --> > > > 26) <!-- [rfced] The URL that was provided for [IEC62439] shows that it's > withdrawn. Please let us know if any updates are needed. > > Current: > [IEC62439] IEC, "Industrial communication networks - High > availability automation networks - Part 3: Parallel > Redundancy Protocol (PRP) and High-availability Seamless > Redundancy (HSR)", IEC 62439-3, 2012, > <https://webstore.iec.ch/publication/7018>. > --> > > > 27) <!--[rfced] FYI, we have reordered the Acknowledgments and > Contributors sections to match RFC style (per RFC 7322). > This diff file compares an altered original so that it's easier > to review the changes in these sections: > https://www.rfc-editor.org/authors/rfc9030-alt-diff.html > > Original: > 7. Acknowledgments > 7.1. Contributors > 7.2. Special Thanks > 7.3. 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