[Captive-portals] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-capport-architecture-08

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Reviewer: Joel Halpern
Review result: Almost Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-capport-architecture-08
Reviewer: Joel Halpern
Review Date: 2020-05-16
IETF LC End Date: 2020-05-25
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This document is almost ready for publication as an Informational RFC

Major issues:
    This document says it is Informational.  It says it describes "a" capport
    architecture.  But the third paragraph of the introduction says that this
    document standardizes an architecture.  The rest of this review assumes
    that is an error, and this is describing "an" architecture, rather than
    "the IETF" architecture.

Minor issues:
    The abstract really should expand "capport".   As simple as having the
    first sentence read "This document describes a "captive portal" (capport)

Nits/editorial comments:
    Following the first bulleted list in the introduction, the document reads:
    "this document does not yet describe...?  The word "yet" seems
    inappropriate.  We are pbulsihgin this as an RFC.  Please remove the "yet".