Re: [Cbor] Review of draft-ietf-cbor-update-8610-grammar-00
Carsten Bormann <cabo@tzi.org> Thu, 14 December 2023 11:07 UTC
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On 2023-12-13, at 18:10, Christian Amsüss <christian@amsuess.com> wrote: > > Hello Carsten, hello group, > > as part of shepherding this document, I'm also giving the full document > one more read. > > Summarizing, it's as ready as one could expect it to be -- the items > below are all editorial. Thank you! I have generated a PR with multiple commits: https://github.com/cbor-wg/update-8610-grammar/pull/1 de2f01b * Shepherd review: streamline abstract and intro 000a88a * Shepherd review: Figure updates (add anchors, update titles, ... 23369e1 * Shepherd review: Remove 1.0/1.1/2.0 language, streamline references 5f411d8 * Shepherd review: Briefly explain "surrogate pairs" 1dfbc46 * Editor's note re https://github.com/ietf-tools/xml2rfc/issues/683 f157e60 * Remove unused BCP14 boilerplate Details below. Grüße, Carsten > * Abstract: As this is currently a copy of the start of the > introduction, I think this could be made a bit shorter and to the > point. Actually, I trimmed both, so they are now the same again (except for not using the referencing syntax in the abstract as per RFC 7322). I also made sure abstract and intro explain how RFC 8610 is being updated. de2f01b * Shepherd review: streamline abstract and intro > * There is a form of elaborate consistency in the labelling of figures, > in that only new normative CDDL is labelled as a figure, whereas > illustrative old CDDL is set in a fixed width block but not accessible > as a figure. > > While understandable from an editing point of view, I think that this > convention will get across as inconsistent with readers, and suggest > that all blocks are turned into figures, with labels like "Previous > string parsing" for the block above what is now Figure 1. I did this for the ABNF snippets, but not for the three CDDL examples. > ... and later in section 3, even that elaborate consistency is not > adhered to. Fixed the ABNF (but not the CDDL) accordingly. Added sourcecode-name attributes for new snippets to help kramdown-rfc-extract-sourcecode. 000a88a * Shepherd review: Figure updates (add anchors, update titles, … > * "compatibility" pointers: Section 2 is described as targeting 1.0 and > 2.0; the other pointers don't have such an annotation. As the > introduction points out that this document defines what is colloqually > called CDDL 1.1, the other could maybe say " Compatibility: backward > (not forward) (new in 1.1)"? Or something prettier than consecutive > parentheses, if the note on section to becomes "Compatibility: errata > fix; applies to 1.0 and 2.0". I’m not sure we even need the “1.1” terminology at this point any more; I already had edited it out from the introduction before writing this... In the end, we will reference the updated ABNF for CDDL by RFC number. So I removed all references to 1.1 and 2.0 and replaced them by “this update” and “CDDL modules” (the latter with an informative I-D reference, as modules are not needed to allow implementing the updated syntax). While doing this, I removed the references to the somewhat ephemeral documents: - I-D.draft-bormann-cbor-cddl-freezer: freezer - I-D.bormann-cbor-cddl-2-draft: cddl-2-draft To do the latter, I changed the note about possibly extending bsqual in the future by pointing to edn-literal instead of cddl-2-draft. I also removed the reference to - I-D.ietf-cbor-cddl-more-control: more-control 23369e1 * Shepherd review: Remove 1.0/1.1/2.0 language, streamline references > * 2.1 (Err6527) explicitly allows Unicode surrogate pairs. It needs them in the string syntax (only) to be like JSON strings. > Can't change > that now, we're in for a dime with JSON strings. but now that it is > visible, for the benefit of younger readers to whom surrogate pairs > are a weird legacy thing, I suggest adding an explicit (greppable) > note that surrogate pairs are JSON's way of expressing Unicode code > points exceeding 0xffff. (This can also be justified by 8259 not being > in the terminology section, so we don't "import" "surrogate pairs"). 5f411d8 * Shepherd review: Briefly explain "surrogate pairs” I wish we could reference draft-bormann-dispatch-modern-network-unicode for more explanation, but that is mired in some less than productive discussion now. > * Is the reference to 9165 necessarily normative? All occurrences of the > reference I've found are either > > * pointing at it to capture the full breadth of CDDL (abstract, 1st > intro) > * defining CDDL 1.1 (but being colloquial i doubt that's normative) > * referring to it in the rationale of a non-change (2.2) Made it informative (still want to have this prominently in abstract and introduction, so people can find which documents they should be reading). Part of 23369e1 * Shepherd review: Remove 1.0/1.1/2.0 language, streamline references > Conversely, 5234 sounds normative, given we're defining rules in ABNF. > (Maybe also 7405). We are not using %s/%i, so I kept 7405 informative and made 5234 normative. Also part of 23369e1 * Shepherd review: Remove 1.0/1.1/2.0 language, streamline references > * Not complaining about the Acknowledgements still having a TODO -- > that section has a tendency to need overhaul after IESG review anyway. Indeed. I also added one editor’s note in this PR: 1dfbc46 * Editor's note re https://github.com/ietf-tools/xml2rfc/issues/683 .. and removed the (currently unused) BCP14 boilerplate f157e60 * Remove unused BCP14 boilerplate Grüße, Carsten
- [Cbor] Review of draft-ietf-cbor-update-8610-gram… Christian Amsüss
- Re: [Cbor] Review of draft-ietf-cbor-update-8610-… Carsten Bormann
- Re: [Cbor] Review of draft-ietf-cbor-update-8610-… Christian Amsüss