[CCAMP] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-ccamp-layer1-types-16: (with COMMENT)

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# GEN AD review of draft-ietf-ccamp-layer1-types-16

CC @larseggert

Thanks to Dale R. Worley for the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review
(https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/qjQFh6-iwZhg106VN_AjpNH1Br8).

## Comments

Agree with Éric on the overly unspecific title and abstract.

## Nits

All comments below are about very minor potential issues that you may choose to
address in some way - or ignore - as you see fit. Some were flagged by
automated tools (via https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool), so there
will likely be some false positives. There is no need to let me know what you
did with these suggestions.

### Outdated references

Document references `draft-ietf-teas-rfc8776-update-04`, but `-07` is the
latest available revision.

Document references `draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-tunnel-model-18`, but `-20` is the
latest available revision.

Document references `draft-ietf-ccamp-transport-nbi-app-statement-16`, but
`-17` is the latest available revision.

Document references `draft-ietf-ccamp-client-signal-yang-09`, but `-10` is the
latest available revision.

Document references `draft-ietf-ccamp-otn-topo-yang-16`, but `-17` is the
latest available revision.

### Grammar/style

#### Section 4.2, paragraph 10
```
ble on a link, as described in Section Section 4.4. This grouping could be u
                               ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
```
Possible typo: you repeated a word.

#### Section 4.2, paragraph 14
```
o be provided, as described in Section Section 4.4. This grouping could be u
                               ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
```
Possible typo: you repeated a word.

#### Section 4.3, paragraph 7
```
me cases, the TPN assignment rules depends on the TS Granularity (e.g., ODU2
                                   ^^^^^^^
```
The verb form "depends" does not seem to match the subject "rules".

#### Section 4.4, paragraph 1
```
ominal bit rate to be defined independently from the type of ODUflex. This co
                              ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
```
The usual collocation for "independently" is "of", not "from". Did you mean
"independently of"?

#### Section 4.4, paragraph 4
```
the value of 'gfp-n', is used to calculated the ODUflex(GFP,n,k) nominal bit
                                 ^^^^^^^^^^
```
The verb after "to" should be in the base form.

#### Section 4.4, paragraph 7
```
lients the value of 'n' is used to defines the value of s=5 x n. The 'flexe-
                                   ^^^^^^^
```
The verb after "to" should be in the base form.

#### Section 4.4, paragraph 12
```
ompute the number of TS required to setup an ODUflex LSP, according to the ru
                                    ^^^^^
```
The verb "set up" is spelled as two words. The noun "setup" is spelled as one.

#### Section 4.4, paragraph 12
```
ompute the number of TS required to setup an ODUflex LSP along the underlay p
                                    ^^^^^
```
The verb "set up" is spelled as two words. The noun "setup" is spelled as one.

## Notes

This review is in the ["IETF Comments" Markdown format][ICMF], You can use the
[`ietf-comments` tool][ICT] to automatically convert this review into
individual GitHub issues. Review generated by the [`ietf-reviewtool`][IRT].

[ICMF]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments/blob/main/format.md
[ICT]: https://github.com/mnot/ietf-comments
[IRT]: https://github.com/larseggert/ietf-reviewtool