Re: [CCAMP] Document shepherd review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-otn-b100g-applicability

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Thank you Adrian for the Shepherd work. All the comments are accepted. We will post the 09 version as soon as possible, as the draft is going to be expired soon.


Detailed reply could be found in-line.






Thanks


Qilei











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发件人：AdrianFarrel
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日 期 ：2022年05月06日 05:34
主 题 ：RE: Document shepherd review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-otn-b100g-applicability


Oh, and you can remove Section 5.

Qilei: well, we will remove this.


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From: Adrian Farrel <[e-mail]>  
Sent: 05 May 2022 22:23
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Subject: Document shepherd review of
draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-otn-b100g-applicability
 
Hi,
 
I have stepped in as document shepherd for this document. Here is my
Review based on -08.
 
While you work on these comments and post a new revision, I'll do the
shepherd write-up.
 
Thanks,
Adrian
 
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Abstract
 
Please expand "LSP" in the Abstract.
 Qilei: will expand "LSP".
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1.
 
Please expand OTN, OTU, ODU, and LSP on first use.
 
s/Since the/Because/
 Qilei: accepted.
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2.
 
Not sure that using lettered bullets is necessary.
 
s/Detailed description/Detailed descriptions/
 
You should probably have a separate entry for TPN in this list.
 
It is probably not important, but I find the use of '5G' to be
unfortunately ambiguous given all the work of the 3GPP. Would it be
possible to use '5 Gbit/s' throughout the whole document?
 


Qilei: accepted.

for the lettered bullets, will replace them with " * ".


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3.1
 
Is it clear what "FlexO" is? The term pops up as though the reader is
supposed to know it.

Qilei: will add some description about FlexO in the section 2.


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In Figure 1 you have
 
    +--------+           +--------+
    |        +-----------+        |
    | OTN    |-----------| OTN    |
    | DXC    +-----------+ DXC    +
    |        |           |        |
    +--------+           +--------+
 
Is that '+' on the right-hand side intentional?

Qilei: well, will fix it.


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3.4
 
'TS' is used in this section (and only in this section) without  
expansion. What does it mean? I think you can...
 
OLD
   As mentioned above, the OPUCn signal has 20*n 5G tributary slots.
NEW
   As mentioned above, the OPUCn signal has 20*n 5G tributary slots
   (TSs).
END
 


Qilei: accepted.

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4.1
 
   Section 3 of RFC7138 describes how to represent G.709 OTUk/ODUk with
   TE-Links in GMPLS.  Similar to that, ODUCn links can also be
   represented as TE-Links, which can be seen in the Figure 4.
 
I think that is "Figure 3"



Qilei: you are right. will fix it.
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4.2
 
'LO' and 'HO' are used without explanation
 


Qilei: will expand them.

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4.2
 
   An example is given in Figure 5 to illustrate the label format
 
Is that "Figure 4"?

Qilei: yes, you are right, will fix it.