[CCAMP] Barry Leiba's No Objection on draft-ietf-ccamp-rsvp-te-bandwidth-availability-14: (with COMMENT)

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Barry Leiba has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-ccamp-rsvp-te-bandwidth-availability-14: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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— Section 3.1 —

      When the Availability TLV is included, it MUST be present along
      with the Ethernet Bandwidth Profile TLV.

I had to read this a couple of time to get it.  I suggest that this reads a bit better:

NEW
When the Availability TLV is included,  the Ethernet Bandwidth Profile TLV
MUST also be included.
END

There’s also a nit in the description of “Availability”: “1and” is missing a space.

— Section 3.2 —

   When a node receives Availability TLVs which mixed of zero index and
   non-zero index,

Nit: “...TLVs with a mix of zero index...”

Nit later in the section: change “there're are” to “there are”.