Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yang-18.txt
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Subject: Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yang-18.txt
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Looking at -19: - you still have 'wavelenghth' which has a 'h' too many, twice -you still have The YANG model described in this document is a WSON technology-specific YANG model augmenting the generic TE topology module [TE-TOPO] based on the information model developed in [RFC7446] and the two encoding documents [RFC7581] and [RFC7579] that developed protocol independent encodings based on [RFC7446]. in the YANG module which MUST be plain text so HTML/XML references are not allowed And the YANG has reference "ITU-T G.698.2 (11/2009) Section 5.3"; - always good to see reference clauses - but it means "ITU-T G.698.2 (11/2009)" needs to appear in the I-D references and needs to be referenced from the body of the I-D reference "TBD"; well, is TBD! Tom Petch ----- Original Message ----- From: "t.petch" <ietfc@btconnect.com> To: "Leeyoung" <leeyoung@huawei.com>; <ccamp@ietf.org> Sent: Friday, December 07, 2018 12:45 PM > ----- Original Message ----- > From: "Leeyoung" <leeyoung@huawei.com> > To: <ccamp@ietf.org> > Sent: Wednesday, December 05, 2018 5:23 PM > > > > This revision, we hope, incorporated all comments from Tom and others. > The co-authors believe that it is ready for WG LC. > > Almost but I fear that there is a step backwards as well. > > You still have two > Wavelenghth > which should probably be > Wavelength > > More problematically, you have introduced > > description > " ... > The YANG model described in this document is a WSON > technology-specific YANG model augmenting the generic TE > topology module [TE-TOPO] based on the information model > developed in [RFC7446] and the two encoding documents > [RFC7581] and [RFC7579] that developed protocol independent > encodings based on [RFC7446]. > > Those [RFC..] look like XML/HTML style references which will not do. A > YANG module must be plain text so > RFC6163 > is fine in a YANG module but > [RFC6163] > is not, which is why, in my last comment, I suggested putting a > reference to RFC6163 in section 1.4 lest you get an unused reference for > the I-D; which you have done, so that is fine, but all those [RFC...] in > the YANG module must go. AFAICS it is only the description clause that > has them. > > For TE-TOPO, you need to use the same text as you have correctly done on > the YANG import statement i.e. > > "RFC YYYY: YANG Data Model for Traffic Engineering (TE) Topologies"; > > /* Note: The RFC Editor will replace YYYY with the number assigned to > the RFC once draft-ietf-teas-yang-te-topo becomes an RFC.*/ > > Whether this is fixed before or after Last Call is one for the WG > Chairs. > > I probably said before that the nature of the module, which you are > forced to use because of the way that tet: is structured, makes the > module very hard to read and that I have not done; I hope to but may > never find the time. > > Tom Petch > > > Thanks & best regards, > > Young > > > > -----Original Message----- > > From: CCAMP [mailto:ccamp-bounces@ietf.org] On Behalf Of > internet-drafts@ietf.org > > Sent: Wednesday, December 5, 2018 11:18 AM > > To: i-d-announce@ietf.org > > Cc: ccamp@ietf.org > > Subject: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yang-18.txt > > > > > > A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts > directories. > > This draft is a work item of the Common Control and Measurement Plane > WG of the IETF. > > > > Title : A YANG Data Model for WSON (Wavelength > Switched Optical Networks) > > Authors : Young Lee > > Dhruv Dhody > > Aihua Guo > > Victor Lopez > > Daniel King > > Filename : draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yang-18.txt > > Pages : 77 > > Date : 2018-12-05 > > > > Abstract: > > This document provides a YANG data model for the routing and > > wavelength assignment (RWA) TE topology in wavelength switched > > optical networks (WSONs). The YANG data model defined in this > > document conforms to the Network Management Datastore Architecture > > defined in RFC 8342. > > > > > > The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is: > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yang/ > > > > There are also htmlized versions available at: > > https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yang-18 > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yang-18 > > > > A diff from the previous version is available at: > > https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yang-18 > > > > > > Please note that it may take a couple of minutes from the time of > submission until the htmlized version and diff are available at > tools.ietf.org. > > > > Internet-Drafts are also available by anonymous FTP at: > > ftp://ftp.ietf.org/internet-drafts/ > > > > _______________________________________________ > > CCAMP mailing list > > CCAMP@ietf.org > > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ccamp > > > > _______________________________________________ > > CCAMP mailing list > > CCAMP@ietf.org > > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ccamp >
- [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yang-18… internet-drafts
- Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yan… Leeyoung
- Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yan… tom petch
- Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yan… Beller, Dieter (Nokia - DE/Stuttgart)
- Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yan… Aihuaguo (Aihua Guo, CRC)
- Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yan… Leeyoung
- Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yan… Leeyoung
- Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yan… Leeyoung
- Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yan… tom petch
- Re: [CCAMP] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-yan… Leeyoung