Re: [core] WG Last Call on draft-ietf-core-conditional-attributes
Marco Tiloca <marco.tiloca@ri.se> Tue, 24 May 2022 21:39 UTC
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Subject: Re: [core] WG Last Call on draft-ietf-core-conditional-attributes
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Hi all, Please find below my review comments. Best, /Marco [Section 1] * "describe a REST protocol [RFC7252]" Perhaps do you mean "describe the REST protocol CoAP [RFC7252]" ? * s/machine to machine/machine-to-machine * s/CoRE Observe/CoAP Observe [Section 1.1] * "This specification requires readers to be familiar with all the terms and concepts that are discussed in [RFC7641]." I would refer also to RFC 7252. [Section 3] * s/CoRE Observe/CoAP Observe * s/simply a "name" without/simply as a "name" query parameter without * s/"Note: In this draft, we"/Note: in this specification, we [Section 3.1] * "to be interesting" Do you mean "to trigger a notification" ? [Section 3.1.3] * s/the change step indicates/the Change Step attribute indicates * s/the old state/the last reported value * s/reported state by an amount/reported value by an amount * s/on resource states represented with a scalar numeric value./on resources with a scalar numeric value. [Section 3.1.4] * In the section title, s/band/Band * s/The notification band/The Notification Band * When "c.band" is present with the "c.lt" attribute, it defines ... I think you mean: When the Notification Band and Less Than attributes are present while the Greater Than attribute is not, then the present attribute pair defines ... * When "c.band" is present with the "c.gt" attribute, it defines ... I think you mean: When the Notification Band and Greater Than attributes are present while the Less Than attribute is not, then the present attribute pair defines ... * s/in which the value/and the value (2 occurrences) * s/value not between/value is not between [Section 3.1.5] * s/the "c.edge" attribute/the Edge attribute [Section 3.2] * s/measurement of the conditions/evaluation of the conditions * s/measurements of the conditions/evaluations of the conditions [Section 3.2.1] * s/the minimum period indicates/the Minimum Period attribute indicates [Section 3.2.2] * s/the maximum period indicates/the Maximum Period attribute indicates * s/the minimum period parameter (if present)/the Minimum Period parameter (if present) [Section 3.2.3] * s/the minimum evaluation period indicates/the Minimum Evaluation Period attribute indicates * s/measurements/evaluations (2 instances) * s/measurement/evaluation (3 instances) [Section 3.2.4] * s/the maximum evaluation period indicates/the Maximum Evaluation Period attribute indicates * s/measurements/evaluations * s/measurement/evaluation (2 instances) [Section 3.2.5] * s/the "c.con" attribute indicates/the Confirmable Notification attribute indicates [Section 3.3] * "and time to prepare for the next notification" I think you mean "and the time when to prepare the next notification". * As to these two lines in the reference code: #define PMIN_EX ( r->last_sample_time - r->last_rep_time >= r->pmin ) #define PMAX_EX ( r->last_sample_time - r->last_rep_time > r->pmax ) Based on the definitions of pmin and pmax, shouldn't these lines rather be like the following? #define PMIN_EX ( current_time - r->last_rep_time >= r->pmin ) #define PMAX_EX ( current_time - r->last_rep_time > r->pmax ) * As to these two lines in the reference code: #define LT_EX ( r->v < r->lt ^ r->last_rep_v < r->lt ) #define GT_EX ( r->v > r->gt ^ r->last_rep_v > r->gt ) Based on the definitions of lt and gt, shouldn't these lines rather be like the following? #define LT_EX ( ( r->v < r->lt && r->last_rep_v >= r->lt ) || \ ( r->v > r->lt && r->last_rep_v <= r->lt ) ) #define GT_EX ( ( r->v > r->gt && r->last_rep_v <= r->gt ) || \ ( r->v < r->gt && r->last_rep_v >= r->gt ) ) * The name IN_BAND can be confusing; its second and third logical conditions relate to what is called out-of-band in the second from last paragraph of Section 3.1.4. Perhaps rename it to BAND_MATCH or BAND_SCOPE ? [Section 4] * "or the configuration of "c.epmin" and "c.epmax" values ..." I think you mean: "or as defined by the "c.epmin" and "c.epmax" values" * s/CoRE Observe/CoAP Observe [Section 6] * In the first paragraph, s/This memo/This specification * In the references column, you can replace "This memo" with "RFC XXXX" (or similar), while adding the usual note to IANA before the table about replacing it with the RFC number. [Section 10.2] * Shouldn't RFC 7252 and RFC 7641 also be normative references? [Appendix A] * "binding attribute / observe attributes" This should be Conditional Notification Attributes and Conditional Control Attributes [Appendix A.2] * The caption of Figure 2 should conclude as: "... when c.pmax time expires." [Appendix A.4] * The caption of Figure 4 should be: "Client registers and receives one notification of the current state, one of a new state (when, coincidentally, c.pmax time also expires), and one of a new state when it passes through the greater than threshold of 25." [Nits] * Section 3.1 --- s/here allow a/here allows a --- s/how often a client/how often the client * Section 3.1.3: s/Note: Due/Note: due * Section 3.1.4, s/ different ranges results in differing behaviour/ different ranges result in differing behaviours * Section 3.2.1 --- s/occured/occurred --- s/whether or not/regardless of whether or not --- s/Note: Due/Note: due * Section 3.2.2, s/whether or not/regardless of whether or not * Section 3.2.3, s/resource since the client/resource, since the client * Section 4 --- s/maximum allow for/maximum allows for --- s/1 or more/one or more --- s/eg/e.g. * Appendix A --- s/brevity the only/brevity only On 2022-05-11 17:53, Marco Tiloca wrote: > Dear all, > > This mail starts a Working Group Last Call for the document: > > https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-core-conditional-attributes-04 > > > Please provide your comments and feedback by Wednesday, the 25th of May. > > Best, > Marco (for the CoRE Chairs) > > > _______________________________________________ > core mailing list > core@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/core -- Marco Tiloca Ph.D., Senior Researcher Phone: +46 (0)70 60 46 501 RISE Research Institutes of Sweden AB Box 1263 164 29 Kista (Sweden) Division: Digital Systems Department: Computer Science Unit: Cybersecurity https://www.ri.se
- [core] WG Last Call on draft-ietf-core-conditiona… Marco Tiloca
- Re: [core] WG Last Call on draft-ietf-core-condit… Marco Tiloca
- Re: [core] WG Last Call on draft-ietf-core-condit… Klaus Hartke
- Re: [core] WG Last Call on draft-ietf-core-condit… John Mattsson
- Re: [core] WG Last Call on draft-ietf-core-condit… John Mattsson
- Re: [core] WG Last Call on draft-ietf-core-condit… Christian Amsüss