Re: [dhcwg] Simplification of DNAv4 specification
Stuart Cheshire <cheshire@apple.com> Thu, 13 October 2005 23:23 UTC
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Subject: Re: [dhcwg] Simplification of DNAv4 specification
Date: Thu, 13 Oct 2005 16:23:03 -0700
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I propose the following typographical edits relative to <http://www.drizzle.com/~aboba/DNA/draft-ietf-dhc-dna-ipv4-17.txt> 1 line changed at 9 -- OLD TEXT -- Detecting Network Attachment (DNA) in IPv4 -- NEW TEXT -- Detecting Network Attachment in IPv4 (DNAv4) -------------- 1 line changed at 98 -- OLD TEXT -- [RFC2119]. -- NEW TEXT -- "Key words for use in RFCs to Indicate Requirement Levels" [RFC2119]. -------------- 1 line changed at 159 -- OLD TEXT -- private addresses as specified in [RFC1918]. -- NEW TEXT -- private addresses as specified in "Address Allocation for Private Internets" [RFC1918]. -------------- 1 line changed at 164 -- OLD TEXT -- not been relinquished, and whose lease has not yet expired. -- NEW TEXT -- not been returned to the DHCP server via a DHCP RELEASE message, and whose lease has not yet expired. -------------- 3 lines changed at 197 -- OLD TEXT -- DHCPREQUEST from the INIT-REBOOT state, as described in [RFC2131] Section 3.2 and 4.3.2 completes more quickly than the reachability test(s). -- NEW TEXT -- DHCPREQUEST from the INIT-REBOOT state, as described in Section 3.2 and 4.3.2 of the DHCP specification [RFC2131], completes more quickly than the reachability test(s). -------------- 1 line changed at 219 -- OLD TEXT -- [b] The host does not know the default gateway(s) on -- NEW TEXT -- [b] The host does not know the addresses of any gateway(s) on -------------- 5 lines changed at 238 -- OLD TEXT -- Note that it's not possible to get more than one reachability test response on a given link, because the first one is the only one that should be accepted. Once a valid reachability test response is received, validation is complete, and additional responses (if any) should be discarded. -- NEW TEXT -- Once a valid reachability test response is received, validation is complete, and any additional responses should be discarded. -------------- 2 lines changed at 247 -- OLD TEXT -- The reachability test is performed by sending an ARP Request. The host MUST set the target protocol address (ar$tpa) to the IPv4 -- NEW TEXT -- The reachability test is performed by sending a unicast ARP Request. The host MUST set the target protocol address (ar$tpa) to the IPv4 -------------- 1 line changed at 250 -- OLD TEXT -- address field (ar$spa) to its own IPv4 address. The ARP Request MUST -- NEW TEXT -- address field (ar$spa) to its own candidate IPv4 address. The ARP Request MUST -------------- 2 lines changed at 263 -- OLD TEXT -- acquisition and expiration behavior described in [RFC2131], Section 4.4.5. -- NEW TEXT -- acquisition and expiration behavior described in Section 4.4.5 of the DHCP specification [RFC2131]. -------------- 6 lines changed at 280 -- OLD TEXT -- address does not provide the same level of assurance since this may require an ARP Request/Reply exchange. Where the host has moved between two private networks, this could result in ARP cache pollution. Where a host moves from one private network to another, an ICMP Echo -- NEW TEXT -- would not be an acceptable way of testing a candidate configuration because sending any IP packet generally requires an ARP Request/Reply exchange, and as explained above, ARP packets may not be broadcast safely until *after* the operability of the candidate configuration has been confirmed. Also, where a host moves from one private network to another, an ICMP Echo -------------- 1 line changed at 314 -- OLD TEXT -- broadcast address as specified in [RFC2131] Section 4.4.2. -- NEW TEXT -- broadcast address, as specified in Section 4.4.2 of the DHCP specification [RFC2131]. -------------- 2 lines changed at 318 -- OLD TEXT -- packet to the broadcast address, as described in [RFC2131] Section 4.4.1. If the host supports the Rapid Commit Option [RFC4039], it is -- NEW TEXT -- packet to the broadcast address, as described in Section 4.4.1 of the DHCP specification [RFC2131]. If the host supports the Rapid Commit Option [RFC4039], it is -------------- 2 lines changed at 324 -- OLD TEXT -- DHCPDISCOVER, then it retransmits as specified in [RFC2131] Section 4.1. -- NEW TEXT -- DHCPDISCOVER, then it retransmits as specified in Section 4.1 of the DHCP specification [RFC2131]. -------------- 1 line changed at 327 -- OLD TEXT -- As discussed in [RFC2131], Section 4.4.4, a host in INIT or REBOOTING -- NEW TEXT -- As discussed in Section 4.4.4 of the DHCP specification [RFC2131], a host in INIT or REBOOTING -------------- 2 lines changed at 361 -- OLD TEXT -- [RFC3927], and MUST NOT attempt to use DNAv4 as a shortcut to bypass that process. -- NEW TEXT -- "Dynamic Configuration of IPv4 Link-Local Addresses" [RFC3927], and MUST NOT attempt to use DNAv4 as a shortcut to bypass that process. -------------- 1 line changed at 367 -- OLD TEXT -- described in [RFC2131] Section 2.3. Where a host can confirm that it -- NEW TEXT -- described in Section 2.3 of the DHCP specification [RFC2131]. Where a host can confirm that it -------------- 1 line changed at 370 -- OLD TEXT -- Local address is deprecated, as noted in [RFC3927] Section 1.9. -- NEW TEXT -- Local address is deprecated, as noted in Section 1.9 of the IPv4 Link-Local specification [RFC3927]. -------------- 1 line changed at 375 -- OLD TEXT -- retransmission algorithm, [RFC2131] Section 3.2 states that the -- NEW TEXT -- retransmission algorithm, Section 3.2 of the DHCP specification [RFC2131] states that the -------------- Stuart Cheshire <cheshire@apple.com> * Wizard Without Portfolio, Apple Computer, Inc. * www.stuartcheshire.org _______________________________________________ dhcwg mailing list dhcwg@ietf.org https://www1.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/dhcwg
- [dhcwg] Simplification of DNAv4 specification Bernard Aboba
- RE: [dhcwg] Simplification of DNAv4 specification Barr Hibbs
- [dhcwg] Re: Simplification of DNAv4 specification Bernard Aboba
- RE: [dhcwg] Re: Simplification of DNAv4 specifica… Barr Hibbs
- Re: [dhcwg] Simplification of DNAv4 specification Stuart Cheshire
- Re: [dhcwg] Simplification of DNAv4 specification Stuart Cheshire
- Re: [dhcwg] Simplification of DNAv4 specification Stuart Cheshire
- Re: [dhcwg] Simplification of DNAv4 specification Stuart Cheshire