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[Dime] OVLI .03 rephrasing, modifications, typos

Maria Cruz Bartolome <maria.cruz.bartolome@ericsson.com> Fri, 05 September 2014 08:28 UTC

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From: Maria Cruz Bartolome <maria.cruz.bartolome@ericsson.com>
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Subject: [Dime] OVLI .03 rephrasing, modifications, typos
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Dear all

I have included some modification proposals directly into the .03 version .doc, either with comments and/or direct modification in the text. 

There are different types of comments/changes:
- I marked in green what I already opened as a ticket, or sent as an individual question.
- I marked in yellow some parts that are pending a discussion that is focused on agent behavior.
- I included some comments made by Ulrich already, and even some agreement attempt we reached by email.
- the rest of comments include rephrasing, clarifications, typos... what I hope could be agreeable without open a ticket for them. If any of those comments is not directly agreeable, and discussion is started, then I will happily open a new ticket.

In general, in the doc there are lot of repetitions that we should avoid. In fact, some parts are repeated even in Non-normative and normative parts. I suggest this is considered for next editing phase.

Best regards
/MCruz

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