Re: [dns-privacy] I-D Action: draft-ietf-dprive-rfc7626-bis-08.txt

Hello,

I found a few minor issues in version -08:

Sec. 4.1, 2nd paragraph: "Another differencce between the DNS data and a 
particular DNS transaction" -> "Another difference is between..." (there 
are two typos, actually, "cc" and "is")

Sec. 4.1, 2nd para: "A single transactions"

Sec. 4.2, 1st para: " "source IP address" is used" -> " "Source IP 
address" is used" (capitalization, not sure)

Sec. 4.2, 2nd para: "For instance, 
_ldap._tcp.Default-First-Site-Name._sites.gc._msdcs.example.org." 
Wouldn’t it be better to explain what this QNAME reveals?

Sec. 5.2, 7th para: "Whilst there are known attacks on older versions of 
TLS the most recent recommendations" -> "... TLS, the most recent ..."

Best regards,
Rafael

On 16/10/2020 13:44, internet-drafts@ietf.org wrote:
> 
> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories.
> This draft is a work item of the DNS PRIVate Exchange WG of the IETF.
> 
>          Title           : DNS Privacy Considerations
>          Author          : Tim Wicinski
> 	Filename        : draft-ietf-dprive-rfc7626-bis-08.txt
> 	Pages           : 29
> 	Date            : 2020-10-16
> 
> Abstract:
>     This document describes the privacy issues associated with the use of
>     the DNS by Internet users.  It is intended to be an analysis of the
>     present situation and does not prescribe solutions.  This document
>     obsoletes RFC 7626.
> 
> 
> The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-dprive-rfc7626-bis/
> 
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> 
> A diff from the previous version is available at:
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