Re: [dns-privacy] I-D Action: draft-ietf-dprive-bcp-op-09.txt

[Bob Harold <[e-mail]>]

On Mon, May 4, 2020 at 10:11 AM <[e-mail]> wrote:

>
> A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts
> directories.
> This draft is a work item of the DNS PRIVate Exchange WG of the IETF.
>
>         Title           : Recommendations for DNS Privacy Service Operators
>         Authors         : Sara Dickinson
>                           Benno J. Overeinder
>                           Roland M. van Rijswijk-Deij
>                           Allison Mankin
>         Filename        : draft-ietf-dprive-bcp-op-09.txt
>         Pages           : 43
>         Date            : 2020-05-04
>
> Abstract:
>    This document presents operational, policy, and security
>    considerations for DNS recursive resolver operators who choose to
>    offer DNS Privacy services.  With these recommendations, the operator
>    can make deliberate decisions regarding which services to provide,
>    and how the decisions and alternatives impact the privacy of users.
>
>    This document also presents a framework to assist writers of a DNS
>    Recursive Operator Privacy Statement (analogous to DNS Security
>    Extensions (DNSSEC) Policies and DNSSEC Practice Statements described
>    in RFC6841).
>
>
> The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is:
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-dprive-bcp-op/
>
> There are also htmlized versions available at:
> https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-dprive-bcp-op-09
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-dprive-bcp-op-09
>
> A diff from the previous version is available at:
> https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-dprive-bcp-op-09
>
>
Thanks for the update.  Some comments.

7.1.1.  Definition of the Trust model

"overtime" > "over time"

7.1.2.  Trust Model Bootstrapping

The whole first paragraph is difficult to parse - it does not seem like
complete sentences.

7.2.2.  Automated Trust Anchor Check

"to to" > "to"
But the sentence does not seem complete.

-- 
Bob Harold