Re: [dtn-interest] comments on draft-irtf-dtnrg-sdnv-03
"Eddy, Wesley M. (GRC-MS00)[ASRC AEROSPACE CORP]" <wesley.m.eddy@nasa.gov> Wed, 04 November 2009 19:53 UTC
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From: "Eddy, Wesley M. (GRC-MS00)[ASRC AEROSPACE CORP]" <wesley.m.eddy@nasa.gov>
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All look good to me; I'll submit a patched version when the system opens up next week. --------------------------- Wes Eddy Network & Systems Architect Verizon FNS / NASA GRC Office: (216) 433-6682 --------------------------- >-----Original Message----- >From: dtn-interest-bounces@maillists.intel-research.net [mailto:dtn- >interest-bounces@maillists.intel-research.net] On Behalf Of Kevin Fall >Sent: Wednesday, November 04, 2009 2:43 PM >To: dtn-interest@mailman.dtnrg.org ilman.dtnrg.org >Subject: [dtn-interest] comments on draft-irtf-dtnrg-sdnv-03 > > > >I vote yes on this document but have some editorial suggestions >described below. > >- Kevin > > > > >Abstract > >s/wire-overhead/overhead/ > >remove "nor is the problem too solution too radical for more mundane >uses" > [sounds like we are positioning ourselves as 'way not mundane'] > >section 1.1 > >s/on the wire// >s/high-rates/high throughput/ >s/bi-rectional support/support from each end of a TCP connection/ >s/side-issues/other issues/ >s/begun/just begun/ >s/total headers/headers/ > >section 1.3 > >s/too-much/much/ >s/somewhat circumvent/ameliorate the consequences of/ >s/since/as/ >s/use SDNVs however/use SDNVs; however,/ >s/too-small/too small/ >s/here of fields/here, of fields/ >s/Internet protocols/Internet protocols,/ >s/wire-format/format/ > >section 2 > >s/currently-used format/format used currently/ >s/On the wire/When transmitted/ >s/wire format// >s/in-order/in order/ >s/leading-zeros/ >remove the sentence starting "Only SDNV's of the currently-...." > [it seems distracting] > >section 3.1 >s/(n/(value n/ >s/left in/of/ >s/Set n to itself shifted right 7 bits/Shift n right 7 bits/ > >section 3.2 >s/in reality// > >section 4 >s/Type"/"Type"/ >s/Length/"Length"/ >(or get rid of all quotation marks) >s/pick fixed-lengths/choose fixed field lengths/ >s/currently-used/current/ >s/one-bit/one bit/ >s/bit-errors/bit errors/ > >section 7 >(will probably need to do a pass on this) > >_______________________________________________ >dtn-interest mailing list >dtn-interest@maillists.intel-research.net >http://maillists.intel-research.net/mailman/listinfo/dtn-interest
- Re: [dtn-interest] comments on draft-irtf-dtnrg-s… Eddy, Wesley M. (GRC-MS00)[ASRC AEROSPACE CORP]
- [dtn-interest] comments on draft-irtf-dtnrg-sdnv-… Kevin Fall