Re: [Ecrit] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ecrit-lost-planned-changes-00.txt
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From: "Caron, Guy" <g.caron@bell.ca>
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Subject: Re: [Ecrit] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ecrit-lost-planned-changes-00.txt
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Hi ECRIT, I reviewed the document against the comments I provided 26 July 2016 (see attached) and finds that all except two comments were addressed in this version. The remaining ones are: c. In Section 5 - uri Not Stored Warning, it is mentioned the 'uriNotStored' is added to the exceptionContainer. I'm no RelaxNG expert but the exceptionContainer doesn't seem to be extended to include uriNotStored in the RelaxNG schema in Section 7; only the basic Exception pattern seems to be defined. Introduction Section 8. Third paragraph: Add a period at the end of the paragraph, after "revalidation". Thanks to the author for addressing my comments. I'm looking forward to see this draft, which already went through WGLC, moving forward. Regards, Guy -----Message d'origine----- De : Ecrit [mailto:ecrit-bounces@ietf.org] De la part de internet-drafts@ietf.org Envoyé : 31 octobre 2017 17:45 À : i-d-announce@ietf.org Cc : ecrit@ietf.org Objet : [Ecrit] I-D Action: draft-ietf-ecrit-lost-planned-changes-00.txt A New Internet-Draft is available from the on-line Internet-Drafts directories. This draft is a work item of the Emergency Context Resolution with Internet Technologies WG of the IETF. Title : Validation of Locations Around a Planned Change Author : Brian Rosen Filename : draft-ietf-ecrit-lost-planned-changes-00.txt Pages : 10 Date : 2017-10-30 Abstract: This document defines an extension to LoST (RFC5222) that allows a planned change to the data in the LoST server to occur. Records that previously were valid will become invalid at a date in the future, and new locations will become valid after the date. The extension adds two elements to the <findservice> request: A URI to be used to inform the LIS that previously valid locations will be invalid after the planned change date, and add a date which requests the server to perform validation as of the date specified. It also adds an optional Time-To-Live element to the response, which informs clients about the current expected lifetime of the validation. The IETF datatracker status page for this draft is: https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-ecrit-lost-planned-changes/ There are also htmlized versions available at: https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ecrit-lost-planned-changes-00 https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/html/draft-ietf-ecrit-lost-planned-changes-00 Please note that it may take a couple of minutes from the time of submission until the htmlized version and diff are available at tools.ietf.org. Internet-Drafts are also available by anonymous FTP at: ftp://ftp.ietf.org/internet-drafts/ _______________________________________________ Ecrit mailing list Ecrit@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/ecrit
--- Begin Message ---Hi ECRIT, I've reviewed this draft and finds the proposed mechanism helpful, well designed and ready for prime time. My review comments are in the sections below where section A is for substantive comments and section B for editorial/cosmetic comments. Thanks, Guy ////// START \\\\\\ Section A - Substantive Comments -------------------------------- a. The document uses the acronym "LI" but it is not defined, expanded or referenced to anywhere. It is not even used in RFC5222. Consider replacing by the generic term "location". b. In Section 3 - <plannedChange> element, the length limit of the URI is defined as "less than 256 bytes". Consider changing to "256 bytes or less". c. In Section 5 - uri Not Stored Warning, it is mentioned the 'uriNotStored' is added to the exceptionContainer. I'm no RelaxNG expert but the exceptionContainer doesn't seem to be extended to include uriNotStored in the RelaxNG schema in Section 7; only the basic Exception pattern seems to be defined. Section B - Editorial/Cosmetic ------------------------------ 1. The document uses delimiters (", ', <>) inconsistently when referring to defined strings and terms. Consider using delimiters in a consistent way throughout the document. An option would be to use <> for elements (e.g., <plannedChange>) and request/response (e.g., <findServiceResponse>), single quotes for attributes (e.g., 'asOf') and double quotes for general English terms (e.g., "as of now"). Abstract Section 2. "The extension adds two elements to the <findservice> request: a URI to be used to inform the LIS..." capitalize "a" after the colon. 3. Spell out "TTL" (i.e., "Time-to-Live") and replace "all queriers" with "clients about" so that it reads "It also adds an optional Time-To-Live element to the response, which informs clients about the current expected lifetime of the validation." Introduction Section 4. First paragraph: Replace "lt;" by "<" in front of "findServiceResponse>". 5. First paragraph: Expand TTL to "Time-to-Live" and put TTL in parenthesis so it would look like "Time-to-Live (TTL)". 6. Second paragraph: Add "-LO" after "PIDF". 7. Second paragraph: Replace "effectivity" (not a word) by "effective". 8. Third paragraph: Add a period at the end of the paragraph, after "revalidation". 9. Sixth paragraph: Replace "lt;" by "<" in front of "findServiceResponse>". <plannedChange> element Section 10. First paragraph: Capitalize "https". 11. First paragraph: Capitalize "uris" (i.e., "URIs") in the last two sentences of the paragraph. uri Not Stored Warning Section 12. Title: Capitalize "uri". 13. Capitalize "uri" in the last sentence. TTL in Response Section 14: Title: Spell-out TTL and put TTL in parenthesis (i.e., "Time-To-Live (TTL)") 15. First paragraph: Add "attribute" after "'expires'" in the sentence starting with "The form of the element is the 'expires'...". 16. First paragraph: Replace "No Cache" and "No Expiration" by "NO-CACHE" and "NO-EXPIRATION" respectively to reflect the actual values as defined in RFC5222. 17. First paragraph: Change "...and MUST NOT be returned in TTL" to "... and MUST NOT be returned in the <ttl> element". 18. Fourth paragraph: Add "value" after TTL in the first sentence. Security Considerations Section 19. Second paragraph: In the fourth sentence, add "attribute" after "uri" and make byte plural (i.e., "The server MUST validate that the content of the uri attribute sent is syntactically valid and meets the 256 bytes limit") 20. Second paragraph: Capitalize "uri" and "http" in the last sentence. 21: Third paragraph: Delete "when" and capitalize "uri" in the first sentence (i.e., " The mutual authentication between client and server is RECOMMENDED for both the initial <findService> operation that requests storing the URI...") \\\\\\ END ////// -----Message d'origine----- De : Ecrit [mailto:ecrit-bounces@ietf.org] De la part de Roger Marshall Envoyé : 19 juillet 2016 16:51 À : ecrit@ietf.org Objet : [Ecrit] WGLC Announce: Validation of Locations Around a Planned Change Today starts a working group last call for: Validation of Locations Around a Planned Change http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ecrit-lost-planned-changes/ Please review the document and send comments to the ECRIT mail list by CoB, July 30, 2016. 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