[Ecrit] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-ecrit-similar-location-18: (with COMMENT)

Lars Eggert via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Tue, 01 March 2022 13:37 UTC

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Subject: [Ecrit] Lars Eggert's No Objection on draft-ietf-ecrit-similar-location-18: (with COMMENT)
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Lars Eggert has entered the following ballot position for
draft-ietf-ecrit-similar-location-18: No Objection

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COMMENT:
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Found terminology that should be reviewed for inclusivity; see
https://www.rfc-editor.org/part2/#inclusive_language for background and more
guidance:

 * Term "invalid"; alternatives might be "not valid", "unenforceable", "not
   binding", "inoperative", "illegitimate", "incorrect", "improper",
   "unacceptable", "inapplicable", "revoked", "rescinded".

Thanks to Russ Housley for their General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) review
(https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/mSoW1geq28l0DgXA32V6cZz01fQ).

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Section 4. , paragraph 1, nit:
>  supposed to be; it is guessing. Therefore the correct location may or may n
>                                  ^^^^^^^^^
A comma may be missing after the conjunctive/linking adverb "Therefore".

These URLs in the document can probably be converted to HTTPS:
 * http://www.w3.org/1999/xhtml
 * http://www.w3.org/2001/XMLSchema
 * http://www.w3.org/TR/xhtml-basic/xhtml-basic10.dtd