Re: [Gen-art] Gen-art telechat review of draft-ietf-6lo-btle-14

[Elwyn Davies <[e-mail]>]

Thanks, Teemu.

I'll keep a look out for version 15.

cheers,
Elwyn

On 15/07/2015 06:43, Savolainen Teemu (Nokia-TECH/Tampere) wrote:
> Hi Elwyn,
>
> Thank you for your review.
>
>> s3, para 2: s/inter- peripheral/inter-peripheral/ [Remove one space]
> I didn't see space in XML version or latest output from xml2rfc, so don't know why it has been there..
>
>> s3.2.2, last para: "(see Section 3.2.2)" is self-referential!  I think you mean 3.2.3.
> Probably so, I didn't find right away discussion that warranted it's addition to -14 version. Changed.
>
> s3.2.4.2, last para (Item 3): s/if most recently/if the most recently/
>
> Changed.
>
>> s3.2.4, para 5: To avoid the slight confusion which I had in the previous version, I suggest a modification to this para to make it clear that the link local address can only occur on comms to the 6LBR and not through it, thus:
> OLD:
>      When a 6LN is sending a packet to or through a 6LBR, it MUST fully
>      elide the source address if it is a link-local address.  A non-link-
>      local source address 6LN has registered with ARO to the 6LBR for the
>      indicated prefix MUST be fully elided if the source address is the
>      latest address 6LN has registered for the indicated prefix.
> NEW:
>      When a 6LN is sending a packet to a 6LBR, it MUST fully
>      elide the source address if it is a link-local address.  For other packets to or
>      through a 6LBR with a non-link-local source address that the 6LN has registered
>      with ARO to the 6LBR for the indicated prefix, the source address MUST be fully
>      elided if it is the latest address that the 6LN has registered for the indicated prefix.
> END
>
> That is a good clarification. Added as proposed.
>
>> s5:  Need to expand UART acronym in new Direct Test Mode text (USB is on the well-known list, assuming it is the Universal Serial Bus meaning).
> I expanded UART and USB at the same time, because it looked nicer to have both there in expanded form..
>
>> s5, last para: s/service attacks/service attack/
> Changed.
>
> Best regards,
>
> Teemu