[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-hip-multihoming-10

[Meral Shirazipour <[e-mail]>]

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Document: draft-ietf-hip-multihoming-10
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2016-08-19
IETF LC End Date:  2016-08-25
IESG Telechat date: NA


Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC, but I have some comments (nits).

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:
-[Page 4], "ESP transform [RFC7402]"--typo?-->"ESP transport [RFC7402]"
-[Page 4], please spell out SPI at first use: "Security Parameter Index (SPI)"
-[Page 5], "elements of procedure,"--->"elements of the procedure."
-[Page 6], "in R1, I2, or R2 packets"..., suggestion to add ref. to  RFC7401 here.
-[Page 6], "(ESP SAs may have an anti-replay window sensitive to reordering)", suggestion to add ref. to RFC4303 here.
-[Page 8], "ACTIVE statte"--typo-->"ACTIVE state"
-[Page 13], "that a host send"--->"that a host sends"
-[Page 16], ".  Mark all addresses....", not clear who marks? the host?. It would be better to clarify the sentence.
-[Page 18], "capabilities for mobility also carry over to mobility", did we mean to multihoming?
-[Page 18], "threats discussed in [RFC4218] involves"--no s-->"threats discussed in [RFC4218] involve"



Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson
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