[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-lamps-rfc5990bis-05

[Christer Holmberg via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
Review result: Almost Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-lamps-rfc5990bis-05
Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
Review Date: 2024-04-18
IETF LC End Date: 2024-04-23
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: The document is well written, and easy to read. As I am not familiar
with RSA-KEM, I don't have comments regarding the changes compared to RFC 5990.
However, I do have an editorial comment that I would like the authors to
address.

Major issues: N/A

Minor issues: N/A

Nits/editorial comments:

Section 1.6 describes the changes from RFC 5990.

Q1: The text mixes between past tense (e.g., "required") and present tense
(e.g., "includes"). Please use consistent grammar.

Q2: It is unclear what "RFC 5990 includes" means. Does it mean that the usage
of something was defined? Was support of something required? etc.

Q3: Similar to the above question, it is unclear what "discussion of this"
means.

Q4: I think it would be useful to include a few words about WHY a change has
been done. If described elsewhere in the document, a reference could be added.