[Gen-art] Review: draft-josefsson-pbkdf2-test-vectors

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
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Document:  draft-josefsson-pbkdf2-test-vectors
Reviewer:  Kathleen Moriarty
Review Date:  23 August 2010
IESG Telechat date: 26 August 2010


Summary:  This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should be fixed before publication.

Major issues: 0
Minor issues: 0
Nits/editorial comments: 3
1.      Introduction, last sentence:
        Replace second "this" with "the" or "the stated"

2.      Section 2, reword the start of the first sentence from:
"Below the input strings" to
"The input strings below"

3.      Section 4, replace:
Remove the comma before the word and, it is not necessary.  Consider removing the word effectively.  If it is available, the word effectively is not necessary.


Thank you,
Kathleen