[Gen-art] draft-ietf-pce-interas-pcecp-reqs-06.txt
Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Thu, 24 July 2008 21:22 UTC
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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-pce-interas-pcecp-reqs-06.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 2008-07-24 IETF LC End Date: 2008-07-31 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Comments: some edtorial problems and suggestions (editorial means they can be handled my the RFC Editor): - 1 page 2: the LSP abbrev should be introduced - 3 page 4 (or before): the ASBR one too (perhaps in 2?) - 3 page 5: I suggest to move the figure 1 at the beginning of section 3 - 3.1 page 5: have proven -> have been proven ? - 4 page 6: perations -> operations - 4.1.1 page 6: another abbrev to introduce: SRLG - 4.2 page 8: change inner '-' by another character like '*' - 4.3 page 8: This document addresses new requirements ^^^^^^^ IMHO the term suggests too much the document solves when it only specifies what are the requirements - 4.3 page 8: The PCEP MIB -> The PCEP MIB (extra space) - 8 page 12: add USA in the first address (MA is not (yet) a Country) Regards Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
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