[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-v6ops-ra-guard-implementation-04.txt (full)

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Sun, 24 June 2012 17:31 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-ra-guard-implementation-04.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20120606
IETF LC End Date: 20120612
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - ToC Page 2: RA Guard -> RA-Guard

 - ToC page 2: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 1 page 3: a funny fact is DHCPv4 (which IMHO is not really over IP)
 is not sensible to this attack, at the opposite of DHCPv6...

 - 2 page 4, title: RA Guard -> RA-Guard

 - 3 page 9, point 6: in fact IPsec has its own issue with fragmentation...
  Nevertheless I agree with the proposed text.

 - 6 page 13: i.e. -> i.e., and e.g. -> e.g.,

 - 7 page 14: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - B page 18: organisations -> organizations