Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05.txt
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05.txt
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Hello Francis, please see my comments below ThanksRoozbeh From: Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> To: gen-art@ietf.org Cc: draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid.all@ietf.org Sent: Monday, December 11, 2017 8:05 AM Subject: review of draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05.txt I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20171124 IETF LC End Date: 20171208 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - ToC page 2 and 11 page 7: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments <Roozbeh> Both spellings are correct but first one is preferred by British English vs. the second one by American. I have no problem to remove "e". - 1 page 2: please expand abbrev in at the first use in the body for URN (optional as it is a well known abbrev according to https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt), NSS and MEID. <Roozbeh> OK - 1 page 2: please mark the RFC 5626 quote as a quote (e.g., in its own paragraph with a few spaces more for indentation. <Roozbeh> will this work for you? RFC 5626 [2] requires that a UA SHOULD create a Universally Unique Identifier (UUID) URN as specified in RFC 4122 [7] as its instance-id but allows for the possibility to use other URN schemes. According to RFC 5626 [2] "If a URN scheme other than UUID is used, the UA MUST only use URNs for which an RFC (from the IETF stream) defines how the specific URN needs to be constructed and used in the "+sip.instance" Contact header field parameter for outbound behavior." This specification meets this requirement by specifying how the 3GPP2 MEID URN is used in the "+sip.instance" Contact header field parameter for outbound behavior and draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn [8] specifies how the 3GPP2 MEID URN is constructed. - 2 page 3: RFC 2119 was updated by RFC 8174 (note the RFC Editor will update this section if you don't) <Roozbeh> I prefer RFC Editor to do it so I pass. Thanks - 5 page 4: UAC abbrev was not introduces: I believe it stands for User Agent Client (so it is bad practice but the text is not ambiguous) <Roozbeh> OK! - 9 page 6: I suggest to remove the comma in "Entities that log the instance-id, need ..." (but if you prefer to keep it I shan't object) <Roozbeh> I prefer to keep it. Thanks - 9 page 6: IPSec -> IPsec <Roozbeh> OK! - 11.1 [5] page 7: RFC 2119 -> 8174 <Roozbeh> I prefer RFC Editor to do it so I pass. Thanks Regards Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
- [Gen-art] review of draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-u… Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-atarius-dispatch-me… R Atarius
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-atarius-dispatch-me… Alissa Cooper