[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-dtn-bpsec-12

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Reviewer: Tim Evens
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-dtn-bpsec-12
Reviewer: Tim Evens
Review Date: 2019-10-02
IETF LC End Date: 2019-10-03
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

Under section 1.4, BPA is referenced in bullet 1 and 2 but is first defined in
bullet 4.  Suggest defining that in bullet 1.

On page 10:

* "never used to sign the cipher- text provided" has an extra space between
cipher- and text.

* "The BCB is decrypted by security- aware nodes in the" has an extra space
between security- and aware.