Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-forces-packet-parallelization-02.txt

Many thanks for you review, Francis.

jari

On 01 Oct 2014, at 16:34, Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> wrote:

> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
> 
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> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
> you may receive.
> 
> Document: draft-ietf-forces-packet-parallelization-02.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 20140930
> IETF LC End Date: 20140929
> IESG Telechat date: 20141002
> 
> Summary: Ready with nits
> 
> Major issues: none
> 
> Minor issues: none
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> - Abstract page 1: the FE abbrev should be introduced (in particular
>  one can believe it means ForCES Element in place of Forwarding Element)
> 
> - ToC page 2 and 6 page 23: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
> 
> - 1 page 3: the ForCES abbrev must be introduced again (the Abstract
>  is not a part of the document for this)
> 
> - 1 page 3: same for LFB
> 
> - 1 page 3 and 2 page 6: modelling -> modeling
> 
> - 1 page 3 (multiple), 2 page 5 (twice) and 9.2 page 26 : Cilc -> Cilk
>  (BTW the reference and wikipedia say Cilk :-)
> 
> - 1 page 3: bad wording:
>  "Being an experimental document the LFB Class IDs cannot be included..."
> 
> - 1.2 page 3: FE itself should be in the list (likely the first item)
> 
> - 1.2 page 3: same for CE...
> 
> - 2 page 5: e.g. -> e.g.,
> 
> - 2.1 page 8, 4.3.3 page 15 and 5 page 17: (not a US vs UK sp!)
>  LFBParallelOccurenceLimit -> LFBParallelOccurrenceLimit
> 
> - 4.2.2 page 14: what is the MergeWaitTimeoutTimer unit?
>  (if the answer is not trivial it should be added in the document)
> 
> - 8 page 25: parallezation -> parallelization
> 
> - Authors' Addresses: please add USA (not US as postal addresses
>  require country names, not ISO IS 3166 codes (BTW VA is a valid
>  3166 code but English is not one of its official languages even
>  wikipedia doesn't seem to have a very clear idea about them :-)).
> 
> Regards
> 
> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
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Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-forces-packet-parallelization-02.txt

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